this dose have some spiolers in it but i do love it!

I liked it! I can't wait for more!! :O)

Wow, It's pretty short... Well you shouldn't forsake small beginnings I guess. The Character/Author Dialouge at the beginning was cute. I haven't seen/done one of those in a long time. But keep it up, obviously, lenghten your chapters, you've got a good thing going so far.

P.S.: The 'dude' his name is Aeacus and the captain of ES.W.A.T.'s name is Lance for future refernce

Come on! Please write about Nikkita... It sounds like its gonna be a good fan-fic!