lovely story, nicely written and very easy to read and get caught up in the movement of it all.

A great story. I liked the part where Fred was thinking about things.

tears in my eyes!

how sad...

woow your story is so good!

I really loved your story. Fred was very realistic and the plot was great. Thanks for sharing!

I really like how you have portrayed Fred and the way she sees the world. I hope you will write more stories about Fred. You capture her voice perfectly!

I am very impressed that you captured Fred's voice so well. You reconciled the visit from her parents with her character it was an episode that I didn't think made much sense, but I liked how you portrayed Fred's side of it. And you expressed her quirks beliveably (although, how does she *know* that she has one stomach, not seven? would seven stomachs lead to a tell-tale regurigation?). Finally, I liked the hints of her sensuality that you sketched not just the dancing, but also her relationship to Angel and Gunn. The latter was an interesting twist.