   Lauralot
2009-02-11 . chapter 1I LOVE YOU.
And I'm not just saying that because you wrote my request. This story was fantastic beyond all levels of fantastication. I don't care that that isn't a real word, I just invented it to express my love for the awesomeness that is your fic.
The method of Jonathan finding the burlap was sheer brilliance. Of course someone so collected and sure of his sanity wouldn't go hunting something like that down for kicks. And that he bought it without realizing it adds to the subtle little hint that he isn't quite as pulled together as he thinks. Also, his comment about people acting like they'd never seen a young man in a suit buying fabric was cute.
Poor Peter. I can't imagine the suffering he must have gone through. I like that you can show Jonathan being a complete sadist with his patients, an absolute monster, yet still make me feel for him. It's brilliant. I also like that he got hurt, I wasn't expecting it, and that's why he decided to make the gas variant of his drug. I know he needed to be able to disperse it in the air to poison Gotham movie-wise, but it's nice to see where he got the idea for such a dangerous drug to be released in such a risky manner. His bat hallucinations were great, as was his sympathy with the scarecrow. He's right, they're really not scary (unless you make them with toxins).
Loved the reasoning for why the mouth is stitched shut on the mask. Such a short little sentence but still effectively unnerving. I like the justification he gave himself for choosing a scarecrow, using the rabbit phobic patient as an example. His breakdown while making the mask was so touchingly sad, as was his trying to reassure himself that it didn't mean anything. It's nice how you can make his struggles so sympathetic while still showing him doing these terrible things.
It was also a very nice touch that Matthew didn't remember Jonathan. Very realistic, too, the kids hurt by bullying remember it far, far longer than the ones doing the bullying. I like how you made Matthew sympathetic as well, even knowing the hell he'd put Jonathan through as a child. On that subject, I like that you wrote relatively little about Jonathan's childhood but still expressed perfectly well how awful it was.
Jonathan comforting Joan was nice as well. That poor woman, trying so hard only to have her trusted coworker poisoning people she wants to help. That she thinks he's so nice was fantastic, as was his weather comment. So something he would do.
Fantastic ending. And the lip licking...is that patient who I think it is? If so, you've just moved from fantastic to goddess. Actually, you're there already.
Thank you beyond words, and once more I LOVE YOU. |
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