Suggestion.
When you change the scene maybe put it as
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*School*
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Since I've noticed when you do a scene change it sometimes gets confusing.

-Ashi

LOL, Eureka the things you say out of misunderstanding.
Cute chapter. :D.

-Ashi

O.O what a steamy love scene :D. lol. Good job on the chapter.

lol. One bed is much better then both split up :D. LOL. <-- Has GF so I know the feeling Renton is having :D.

Nice job. I like what you did with the story. Just how I like long anime series I like long stories so I can enjoy it more even though when it comes to an end I'm usually a bit sad but fulfilled :). Since they prob won't be making another Eureka Seven with something coming up. Since in the end you see them in the woods Eureka glowing and her and renton with something blinking. Figured it was a Compac Drive.

-Ashi

GO AXEL, LOL.

No more criticism so far. Good job on the chapters.

Onto the next chapter.

A little bit on grammar.
Ex: He listened to her breath
Correct: He listened to her breathing.
I'm pretty sure that's correct. Just minor things I caught that made the sentence kinda weird.

Still GJ and I like how the story is coming along. Now I'm just waiting for the usual bully to act like an ass towards Eureka or somebody to act fearful. As we all know human nature.
"We fear what we don't understand and sometimes try to destroy/kill it."
Not everybody though.

Onto the next chapter.

Good chapter. No complaints at all about this one. I'm still amused about the whole sex thing. Explaining it to Eureka should be interesting. Hell I'd say show it, lol. Things called protection which I'm sure they have ;). Now I'm laughing at picturing Renton trying to buy some. LOL! Would be an interesting chapter though. If you haven't gotten to that part yet I'd say try writing such things, lol.

Well me being almost 24 I've become quite good with such things, lol. Did a couple of those chapter types when I write Princess Mononoke Self Insert story. Got some major comps about how good I was at it, lol.

Anyways good job. Onto the next chapter!

Ja Nee

I couldn't put my finger on this till now, but no offense to you. I know going through such things during the series would change a person. But adding dear and so on, idk just doesn't sound like Renton, lol.

My reasoning for the first statement is Renton during the series doesn't really add much of the sweet stuff. It's his tone that has that lovely dovely sound to it when he says Eureka.

A bit OOC but still a good story so far.

I loved the "How are babies made?" by Eureka. I think she made that comment on the Gekko Go also during the series, can't remember though, lol.

Anyways GJ on getting me to laugh :D.

So far, So good. Keep up the good work.

As there's more chapters. I'd suggest longer length in the chapters. Otherwise good beginning. Though you should have given a little explanation on if there was a reason they came back or at least writing about their departure to bellforest :). Would have been a good chapter, prob. Plus would have added length :).

yay this is so cool!

btw...

when are renton and eureka gonna do it?

nice story update when ever u fill like it. just continue:)

Just got caught up on the past two chapters.

I think you got it backwards. Chapter 8 was filler, chapter 9 is seriously good stuff.

Chapter 8 is okay, but it's just a nice scene of Renton and Eureka at a concert, a quick reason to have Axel and the kids out of the way, and some rewrote song lyrics.

This chapter, was fantastic though. A nice Renton and Holland character development moment, and then a good sequence of Renton and Eureka alone in the dark, that includes sweet moments, a little sexual tension, and even a touch of cute embarrassment. This is the good stuff.

Anyway, still a great story, and it's getting better.

This is a good story. Please continue. Renton and Eureka forever.

IS IT TALHO? lol just jokin i just going to guess HOLLAND lol nah um wow this hard DEWEY nah uhh DOMINIC lol crap it had to be some one renton knew it turned into a nightmare... darn cliffhanger