I'm glad I persevered through the dark, angsty stuff and got to the end. It was a good story. I especially appreciated the continuity of your using characters from old episodes like Wilson and Jardine...that made it feel authentic.

I'm not sure I buy that Tony has such low self-esteem in the area of his job. (In chapter one, he seems down on himself about *everything.*) I agree that he probably feels like a failure at relationships, though. In spite of this, you made his motivations and intentions very believable, to use actor-y terms, so I was convinced and bought into it.

Sometimes in a story that has so much interior emotional exploration, not much happens. But you avoided that trap and had plenty of plot and storyline going on.

I also liked the way you switched POVs, from Tony to Gibbs, so that we got to see him from the outside as well.

This may seem minor, but it's a big deal to me. Thanks for using good grammar, spelling, punctuation and vocabulary. It makes the old English minor in me smile.

I look forward to reading more of your stories.

aw loved the ending!

you had me so worried for a bit there.

nice ending =]

this iss relly deserving of all kudos..
love the mW / DA reference...thanks fo this ..lol

really just a priceless jewel in the ncis fanfic universe.
i love ncis, and fanfiction, but it is so hard to find a story where the writing, plot, character development and creativity are all great.
i had tears in my eyes reading the last chapter, it was my favorite.
and i love how, for half of the story, everything seemed falling apart, and it wasn't until the very last minute that things..finally to seem to be coming together again. keep writing! especially tony centric stories, they're my fav!
-leah

I love that you made Dwayne Tony's second. I really loved his character when he appeared last season; such a great cross between Tony and McGee. I would point out that Dwayne made it clear to Tony in 'Collateral Damage' that he was married; that might oughta have figured into the whole Tony-waking-up-hung-over-at-Dwayne's-apartment thing, but it's not too important and more unnecessary when considered with the plot you intro-ed.

I liked this story a lot and I'm loving 'Transitional State.' I hope you haven't completely given up on the series yet; Ziva's still in need of rescue somewhere in the world, so maybe - just maybe - things'll change for the better.

Tears

Awesome!
Great TIVA-ness.

Really enjoyed this! I especially liked this last chapter, and what you did with Tony and the team in San Diego -- who he chose for his team and why, how they developed. Your style supported the parts of the story that were a bit on the melodramatic side (e.g., the immediate investigation and arrest of the SD team in place, the hit and death of the SD team) and you kept things moving well. And even though it's done fairly often, the audio-only portion you did with Tony's injury (the "wo-hiss-beep" part :}) was done really well!

It's always great to find well written, articulate fic! thanks!

I loved this. Your writing style is really great. The story is nice and tight. The characters are well done and true. You've told a complete, believable story with very few words. I can't write short, I'm too long winded with my descriptions, so I'm really impressed when someone else does and does it so well.


LindaC

this was an amazing story. it also ended well unlike many that leave you with a lot of questions. the best part though is that if you wanted you could always write a sequel. heck you could make a mini series of them. so please write a sequel.

Incredibly well written with utterly believable characters and situations. Thank you.

I loved it!! Sure, it was a little angsty for my taste, but that would probably be how Tony would handle the situation. He would run away from his feelings and act like, well like Gibbs. Although, you didn't mention how Officer Rivkin killed that American Agent . . . it does not matter, I liked the story anyway. You were very descriptive, very realistic. You sounded like you knew what you were talking about, and regardless of whether you did know what you were talking about or not, it sounded great!! Keep writing, I loved your story so much!!

~Sbteja

Excellent short story...I was there the whole way,could see it in my mind...excellent!

I like that about six hundred more times than the final. Tons of Tiva action, normal killing action and more than enough angst. Excellent writing! I can't wait to see more from you...please don't let the crappy season stop you from writing NCIS fics. :)

Okay, so my question is... why aren't there more dude-writers? Oh yeah, because you'd show them all up!

You've pegged these characters with such complete knowledge of their ways/motives that the inner monologues easily carry the voices of their actors in the reader's head. One cannot list for you the great lines, as the comment box isn't big enough.

I also wholeheartedly agree with your profile sentiment on the glories found within canon. Honestly, there's enough meat without having to step into the realm of the impossible (Ducky/Gibbs? Really?). Thanks for making a valid point. But mostly, thanks for being a kick-ass writer : )