I loved it. it was so nice.

wow this is different,

i like it :D

i hope u update soon

this is a neat little story. you have good grammar and your writing has some decent prose to back it up as well! very refreshing. there's some things i have to make a note on though. the main character's name, yoshiko, is actually not a male name. the -ko suffix on names in japanese is used for girls. so, you could instead say yoshi, yoshiro, or any of those variations. i didn't like the "sex didn't feel like rape" part. perhaps you could word it a little differently, because the word rape has a very nasty connotation that doesn't flow well with the image of your sentence. maybe something like, "sex didn't feel routine" or something to that effect. i'm sure you could come up with better. i noticed halfway through that you switched from past tense to present tense, and that sort of threw me off a bit. it's usually better if you kept things in one tense.

keep writing!