first off let me say that you are NOT a shitty writer ^_^ this plot is very intense and attention-grabbing; and other than a few spelling errors it is quite a dark fantasy you've got going for you. I can't wait to see what happens next ^_^

oh i'm oh so very glad you continued,
i have loved the other chapters.
again thank you ever so mutch,your writing is brilliant..certainly better then mine atleast.
:)
please,do continue

Very dark take on the original "Alice," it's really interesting. Your characters are fairly well developed and the descriptions are also well done. You need some work with verb tense though. I would suggest reading a chapter aloud to help catch errors in tense. I look forward to reading your next chapter!
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hes so wonderfully random :P

*wince again at f word* The story is maybe facinating to readers.

*wince at f word* You write well Crazyone911.

Sque! Damn I love this story! I hope she washes the kitten soon, poor thing...

hope you havnt given up on this story,
i love it and wanna find out what happens next.
^.^
pplleeaassee continue!
O.O

One of the most fascinating, entertaining, inspiring stories I've read in quite a long time. There are a few typos here and there, but they are not so prominent and bothersome as to subtract from the thoroughly engaging tale. <3 I hope to read more soon.

let me quess...
the twins are bassed on tweedle dom and tweedle dee?
the cat is obviously alices cat but the way she died(with a smile)probably likens to that of the cheshire cat.
i'm having great fun trying to figurer them out,i really am,oh and great story by-the-way,i am thurally enjoying it!

Write MORE!

Nice

I like this story, it's a little different from what I first thought, but it's good!

Yes a touch of darkness but good writing. Precious. Nice. Cool

Hm... The main character is a lot like a good friend of mine lol. It's dark and gorey but it's not much of a horror... But then again I'm rather immune to abnormal and creepy heheheh and in fact like them. ~shrug~ Go figure! Ah well, anywho it's rather fascinating and I hope you update soon so I can find out just where that maskfaced creature leads her next. Hope a certain Hatter wins her over ^_^.