loved the fic it was full emotion & the best I'v read in a while!

good story but the enemies in Birth by Sleep are called the "Unversed" not the "Endless".

quite boring!!
not cool

...
it cool

Who knows if the erasing will really be done like this, but we'll just have to wait. Ah yes, and another morbid concept that could have been added would be if Ven was made to sign the contract in his own blood. After all, it is a blood for blood contract, right? (Though I don't know if Maleficent would have to do the same.)

I think I like this story best, maybe because of its sad theme, and I knew what would happen in the long run. Also I like the brotherly bond between Ven and Sora. I can actually picture that even if they aren't blood brothers. The contract with Maleficent idea was genius and added more of the irony theme to the story.

I don't know if you're familiar with Super Smash Bros. Brawl or Fire Emblem, but Smash Bros. has a music track from Fire Emblem: Radiant Dawn; in Smash Bros. it's called Ike's Theme, but in the original Radiant Dawn it's known as Eternal Bond (at least I believe so). For some reason, I feel that that track could go well with Birth By Sleep and certain other elements of KH, namely the friendships between: Terra, Aqua and Ven: Roxas, Axel and Xion: and of course Sora, Riku and Kairi. If you don't know what I mean, you should search for the song and listen for yourself.

This has got to be the best in-universe fic I ever started to read! I usually read some with a pairing in it, but the brotherly vibe to this fic make it all so better to read!

Ventus is just cute and I'm happy to know he's the main character to this fic. The names to the OC characters fit very well; it's like an alternate reality that could have been a strong possibility !

The whole birthing process of Sora and Roxas the hero who was born and the other who wasn't just makes this story even more interesting to read!

I'm wondering if I'll stumble in reading Aqua and Terra along the way; hopefully I will.

Sora would be the crying one when becoming born while Roxas the quiet one. lol, they seem so adorable! =D.

You have been reviewed by yours truly,
Kiome-Yasha =D <3

Great ending! Loved this story a lot! Like the rest of your works as well, but this is definitely a favorite!

gah, sora never really learn to read properly anyway. soo cute and sad all at the same time, especially since it's over

~Shazichan

Woo! Fantastic end to a fantastic story!

...Aw to Riku still insisting that he's the boss...

Terra needs a hug...

I loved the bit with little-Sora finding the photograph at the end!

=D

I can't wait to read more from you!

*sniff* what a wonderful story! hopefully it won't end as a trilogy though, surly a author of your skill can think of something else

lol.
you're such a sap.
okayy...
that's because-
a)I'm easily distracted
b)I'm only fifteen
c)I haven't written fanfiction for as long
and i pfft at you once again.
:)

i've read all 3 of these stories and to say this one strock my heart the hardist, one of the reasons is because Sora for getting his brother, it strock me hard but i new it would happen.

I feel like you should have made something like...I dunno a deeper epilogue, rather than telling what happened to everyone...no wait, that's an epilogue xD I mean, make some insights that stands on a neutral point of view as if to emphasize...the end :D

The poem didn't hit me much. The climax did haha. Still, not a very bad way to end the chapter. A bit disappointing, but overall, the story's very good. You missed some details overall, but that's it.

I wish we could have seen more of Ventus in the end, but he's dead and forgotten :(

Oh and report the firefly thing reviewer. He's very annoying spamming you.

A beautiful, sombre ending to a beginning. Really not much more that I can think of at the moment.

May the Grace of the Valar Protect You

Shire Folk