Very good story! This one and the other one! I cried, I'm such a baby! Keep writing! I would love to read more stories from you!

-Demetra

Love it!

Great great lemon! I love this outtake!

Then again...I love Edward and Bella lemons so..

But it was definitely written well!

I quite liked this outtake, maybe because I love smutty ExB...yeah, that's probably it. Hahahaha, keep it up!

Um..Guh. *shakes head** These kids need to work things out and stay together.

I'm jealous! I want to be Bella! lol

I read Stay and came to these outtakes through the link on your profile. I'm not disappointed! I very much enjoy your writing style. The way you incorporate humor into the story makes it so much better. And you're right about being visually descriptive. Putting the vision in a reader's mind is a skill so may lack. Anyway, looking foraward to more of whatever you write!

this chapter so belongs in the main story...i loved it.

Outtakes Love

Well, that was just f**king wonderful! You sure this is your first fanfic? You've definitely got a talent for writing erotic sex scenes!

Seems inadequate to say: thank you!

I really enjoyed this alternate ending! In all honesty, I think either of these (including the one you chose) would have worked for closing off the chapter. You did a wonderful job with them both.

Beautiful, thanks for sharing the outtakes :)

Yikes, hot hot hotness. I love when characters that are so in love with each other have passionate sex! :)

And thank you for all the nice Edward dreams I am sure to have tonight.

love the outtakes... love the story... cant wait till you update both!