-Ever love when you get so into a FanFiction that you blank out then some one tries to talk to you, even worse when some one hands you a phone!- Now... back to those sounds... <3

The ending was so beautiful, and I actually oddly can see, -does some times get so out of it that she looses sight to some level- it was sweet, hot, and really well written. Light in such a way trully amuses me, and seeing L so cylindrically off and into something it trully enjoyable in it's own way.

Very hot, very IC and also, you know, hot XD Loved it!

heheh. what violent and delicious souls.

by the way, whatever happened to your unfinished stories? have they been cut short, never to become anything more than they are-- like a cocoon torn open early (i'm feeling metaphorical), or is there still hope?

don't tell me, i want to be surprised (or else greatly disappointed).

Wow, amazing! I love how the story is not just about the sex but the mind games they play on each other. Very well written!

Gah, took me damned long enough didn't it? *shakes head* Right. Been a busy month.

This is an interesting little fic... I like how you deal with the emotional/psychological implications. I, personally, would focus less on the sex itself and more on those implications, but that's purely a matter of taste. As it is it works fine.

The characterization is fantastic - L smiling and mocking and lying so well, and Light laughing and playing along, more entranced than he's ever been before. Light trusts him, but only as far as knowing that this isn't L's avenue of attack - and even if L attacks him, it'll be worth it.

I love the parenthetical bits! They're such a nice stylistic flourish, and the last one is So Bloody Fantastic. They make the style a bit more abstract than you normally write, but I can rock that. *nod*


I like it. Nicely done.



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Ahh... nothing like a nice, cathartic, and best of all kinky PWP in the wee hours of the morning when sleep would look attractive to a saner person.

Although I've noticed that, with really good authors, PWP stops feeling like PWP and starts feeling like something more. Porn With Plot, maybe...? This was one of those stories, I think.

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GUH. You remain the master, madam. >:D

they're both so mean to each other, yet they can't stop the desire.
that's a great element and I really felt it in this one-shot :D
and the blind fold only added to that part :)
great writing as always :p
~bookenworum

Whoa. You blew my mind. You wrote in such impressive detail that I can perfectally picture it in my mind.

that was very, very, very good. thought provoking porn is one of the best things there is. what is so great about L and Light is that half the kink comes from the fact that is them, and the way they interact with each other, and you have shown that really well.

Your stories are always extremely well written, and well considered, and this was no exception to that rule. I'm not even sure what it is - you just - somehow - capture them so very well, both their positives and their negatives. Thank you, really! :)

This is one of the best LxLight stories I have read. Besides the fact that it is DAMN SEXY, your characterisations are perfect. It makes the whole thing feel like it could actually happen unlike in other stories where Light suddenly turns from being Kira to a lovesick puppy. It has a lot of potential if you could flesh it out and make it into a multi-chapter fic.

I *really* liked the last two lines. It perfectly tied everything together for me.

I also like how you use the parentheses-or however it's spelled-to bring out what the characters can't or won't admit to themselves. That was very nice. :)

-Actually, the problem might come to be one day, when L is nothing but a gravestone and rotting ash, learning how to not see him- : this sentence is incredibly beautiful, but in a dramatic way. All the story, even in the most intense moment, is characterize by a sense of tragedy, of loss. It seem that sex is a moment of perfect union and comprehension before the end, before the death. Very good story!.