wow, that was actually pretty intense. you have me really interested now; please continue!

Wow... That was so good and sad... :( I loved it. :D

What did the note say? Omg I wanna know! O_O

OMG i love that story to much can't wait for the next chapter plz try to update soon

Oh wow... This was so sad... I actually cried a bit...

Anyway, ths was a good chapter. I hope you continue this,as sad as it is. I love sad stories... XD

Good work. :D

Wow... I've only read the first chapter and I'm already hooked.

Normally, I hate suicide. In general. However, for some odd reason, I like reading stories about it. Is that weird?

Anyway, this was really good.Intense. I definitely want to read further. Great job. :D

very good second chapter. the will was very Kaiba-like, sarcastic yet serious at the same time. nice job.

keep up the splendid work.

I think this story has a lot of potential. Please continue writing.

So far this is an excellent story! I can't wait to see what happens next!
Poor Seto!! :(

The beginning is very good, with an outside character providing the proberbial third party to describe the events clearly. The quality tapers off a little once you hit the actual suicide scene, in my opinion.

Perhaps it's just me, but I've never favored quoting actual songs. It's the "show don't tell" philosophy of creative writing; instead of saying "go listen to this song and it'll tell you instead what it was like", describe the sound of the song itself, leaving out titles.

I don't really subscribe to this portrayal of Kaiba, but the cool and calculated plan towards doomsday is certainly characteristic. Perhaps an extended section on his reasoning for suicide might help. If you do, mix it into the end scene itself.