Wow...that was utterly fantastic. That would make the perfect short movie I think. I couldn't help but crack smiles and laugh as I continued to read all this mass mayhem these two were putting thier surroundings through to shop at the "Double Half-Dollar Store". Even when people were getting killed I couldn't help but picture how hilariously spontaneous and rather pointless the entire ordeal was. And not only was the action great, but your description and grammar were flawless as well. You did a great job in every aspect of the story as far as I can see. Well done.