Alternate viewpoint story. So far, well-executed! The hypothetical etymology for the Wave Gun is a brilliant touch! Very well written from a technical standpoint, very lean, retaining description and remaining an accessible read while still having little gems for those that dig a little deeper. Believable characters, engaging style. I particularly enjoy the military "feel" of the security group. If this continues, I would like to see more "easter eggs for nerds" like the "w/AVE". I'll be subscribing.

Very cool start, I hope you decide to write more.

Welp... now that you've hooked us, you know that we're going to demand more.

I mean, is the bounty on Lynch for him being alive, or dead?

Who gets to live? Who develops an irrational hatred of Samus? Who unwittingly admires her and her toys?


We just got to know!

I find this rather interesting, possibly something to be explored a bit more?
Take a couple of bites into it see if you can satisfy us the readers and yourself while your writing it eh?

Yay, I finally get to read this…I was waiting until I actually had time to read it sufficiently and give a review. X3 This was really awesome, Tiki…

Characters—Even though, like you suggested, they’re disposable (they really could go one way or another, very interesting…), I wouldn’t mind knowing more of them. I loved these descriptions: The paragraph leading up to “Bill asked for a raise and got it” and “His muscular bulk and fiery orange mane combined to give him the appearance of a warlord back in the pre-space days.”

And Samus! Samus samus samus…I liked this description of her: “a hint of femininity in its gait.” I think many people portray her as all or nothing, like, she’s different because she’s a completely manly…woman, but, she still is a girl…

…And she kicks their asses. Yeeah!

Plot—It was interesting in just this chapter alone, and it could definitely be continued into something longer. I wouldn’t mind seeing where it leads…Gregory Lynch, and such…

Style—Simply excellent. You write both action and background cleanly and efficiently.

This was really well-done, and everything Metroid is awesome, so yeah…anyway, if you ever have the desire to continue this or write a Metroid story…I would definitely read it…

Wow, Well done, this is really well written in Characterisation, content summary, the whole lot, i really hope you update, though your your A/N didn't sound promising.
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Please Update.

Heh, it's never a good idea to get attached to Samus Aran's targets.

I guess this is before Metroid 1, one of Samus's first assignments?

Killer. Cool that your trying something different from the typical story lines, and the exterminator characterization is a favorite by far. hope you write more

I like this story so far. I like seeing actions of Samus from the perspective of the hunted.
I like how the body guards don't know about all of Samus' abilities which adds a nice tone to the story.
I hope to see more of this story.