i love Ronon!

oh boy...

Because I'm a mean, black-hearted, cold and horrible person, I'm glad Raina didn't survive and indeed that she met her end the way she did, but I also felt a bit sorry for her and for McKay and how he felt about her. Wow, long sentence. Anyway, great story; very well written and inventive. Your McKay voice was excellent and I think you handled both his *normal* mercurial moods and changing behaviour and feelings throughout his ordeal really well. Ronon I thought was also particularly well written and in character, but without making him appear like a one-dimensional, gun-happy moron - a crime I consider the series writers to have been guilty of on more than a few occasions.

Also loved the pop-culture references peppered throughout, particularly when McKay was confusing his captors with them but most especially the first reference to Marcus Brody because I got it before it was explained! Yay! Go me! (I'm usually a bit thick if it's not spelled out for me lol!)

I just want you to know, only a few characters have made me feel apoplectic with rage and frustration, but Raina is one of them. I really want her to die in the worst way possible and be dumped in a shallow grave.

Oh, McKay can read the traders' language of Pegasus? (Which is, as seen in 'Coup d'Etat', despite pronunciations NOT English.) Not that I'm surprised, but I AM elated you actually wrote it this way! ^^

Why would the Earth point of origin be the 'home' symbol for Atlantis? In chapter six McKay states that the people who built Atlantis called themselves Lanteans (Actually, at that point they were 'Alterans' and only those who settled on Old Lantea between 30,0 and 45,0 years ago - so estimated according to the information in 'Echoes' - became known as 'Lanteans' to the expedition members and higher developed Pegasus natives.) and therefore did neither build nor first station the city on Earth. (They fled there with their ships already complete when the Plague hit.)
Given those who created the traps probably knew them as Lanteans too, the symbol for the point of origin should have been that used as seventh chevron by the Atlantians during the first three seasons. (I think that one was shown in 'Underground', and it's as complicated as the others. I understand why you couldn't use one of the intricately dotted Pegasus symbols; it's just that Rodney's explanation makes no sense.)

Jeez, hasn't Ronon learned anything from crippling poor old Daedalus to the brink of destruction? Why didn't he just hand one of those knives he dons like clothing over to Rodney to pry the cover off, while Ronon kept his attention where it should have been?
And later, when he 'jogged' 'several feet' to the corner 'far away from the recessed door', why doesn't that trigger another rock fall? Oh, and by the way, just how often did Ronon get stunned with his own blaster to have become so intimately familiar with those effects? Or was that just the general getting-stunned feeling that Wraith weapons also cause?

As for Raina, forty or not, with her behavior she kind of reminded me of that lunatic Genii girl in your 'Thieves'-story. Only at times she actually seemed redeemable, so I was really hoping for a better ending for this one, but alas - even her death was the same.
Which just fits with the story's theme of recycling old and well known plot devices, I suppose. ^.~ Yep, very 'Last Crusade' indeed, and I liked Rodney mentioning that so early on. What confused me a little was when John and Teyla only compared their situation to the first two movies, but then I thought maybe the aliens hadn't seen the third one yet. Only, at the end with the way they discuss the characters, that rather negates that idea, so yeah: how come they never noticed the *trap* parallels? I mean with the invisible thing, the crawling and having to watch one's step, it should have been so obvious ...

But let's just say that all in all I really enjoyed your remix! And how you wound it up referring to the beginning again was just hilarious. Thank you for writing. ^^

Great story

Rodney pitted against the kidnappers with only his wit and charm...Herod and Raina will certainly regret their decision to take him. I'm pretty sure they already have.

With Rodney and company activating the traps/doors with a map how long will it take the others to figure them out?

Wow! Brilliant story! And you were so creative with all your riddles and traps. I absolutely enjoyed reading it and thank you for posting!

Hi Tipper!

Absolutely loved your story :) Thanks for sharing it with us. Nice bit of hurt for poor Rodney, excellent team and although Ronon/McKay interaction is rare, this was very well done.

I actually liked Raina, even though she was totally nuts. Maybe that's because I like Rodney torment so much and she really messed around with him. Heheh... :o

Can't wait for your next offering!

That was a lot of fun. Rodney and Ronon sitting in a tree...I liked their scene together. A very nice comoraderie between the two. Now I am a sad little girl. The story is completed. It is time to let it go. Thanks for a wonderful look at our team!

Great story! I really enjoyed it. :)

Ahahahahahaha! I loved this chapter! You hit Ronon and Rodney's relationship on the head. They don't really understand each other at all but they still work in their own weird way.

that was really great. I liked the part where Ronon & Rodney were talking near the end.

Oh, Tipper, thank you so much for this wonderful story!! I absolutely LOVED this story!!

The last chapter was just the perfect ending! Team Love! And Rodney teasing Ronon for liking him and including him among the people he would protect at all cost!*contented sigh*

I hope to see another story from you in the near future. Your stories always leave me with a good feeling and smile on my lips. Thank you again for sharing your stories with us!

Great ending!

What an adventure and I love your McKay. You portray him better than the show. Sometimes the writers made him out to be the frank burns of the Pegasus galaxy and you have him as a sympathethic and human character, just so much more likeable.

I always love Ronon and Rodney together that's why I wrote my Fatman and Ronon series. Please more stories!