urm... wow!, i love the fanfic!

Nice fic... I sorta did like GLaDOS... Except when she tried killing people...

I remember the line "You will be baked, (Subtitles show GARBLED) -and then there will be- cake.

Awesome fic. :D

I like it. It has the feel of Portal.

I'm enjoying this story a lot, I have to say. It's interesting how everything seems so corrupt, and I can't wait to find out GLaDOS' actual role in all of it. Was she controlled during the test, though no one was in the building?

And it'll be so exciting to see how things play out with Dr. Hare!

Though, you might want to find a beta reader, there are a few grammatical mistakes and your interpunction could use a bit of work - it's nothing major, really, but a beta can always help with cleanup. Just a tip!

Okay writing, good story and some decent humor in there. Could use a little more editing, but it's quite readable nonetheless. Keep up the great work!

Wow. I caught the summary and started to read then got hooked into it. And I just played a little of Portal myself. When is another update going to be posted? This is an awesome story and I'm itching to see what happens next. You can't just leave it here. Please?

Yay! You updated!

Haha, I loved this paragraph:

“Well it was...Chel- I mean the test subject. She asked me.” He said this as quickly as possible. “I know I'm not supposed to be talking to her but it was only a little thing. She just wanted to know if you worked here...” He trailed off as he saw the strange expression on Dr. Hare's face. “I'm...going to lose my job aren't I...”

I just found it so comedic.
Keep up the good work.

Yay, an update! ^^
Chell calling GLaDOS "Camera" was pretty funny. xD

GLaDOS's insistence on Chell talking up to "“I knew you could do it.”", and "“Sadly, there will be no more deadly neurotoxin.”" made me laugh. You got her voice down pretty well! I'd been wondering what GLaDOS would be like with the morality core, in, and you've answered that question while keeping fluidly to your plot.I'd like more description of where they are, what the room looks like, but otherwise this is excellent. Poor Chell, used to having puzzles to do and now she's got to sit there! But in her escape attempts, she comes across as clever as the player in the game had to be.

It is mysterious that these people seemed to have escaped GLaDOS' takeover of the facility. And now the AI is as much a prisoner as Chell is! Intriguing.

I do have a bit of crit--you're missing some commas in the beginning for where people are being addressed, such as in "She's awake now sir."

But this is well-done-you seem to be thwarting both Chell and the naive Aiden at every turn!--and unlike most fanfics I've read lately I'm eager to continue.

Good prose, and your using "the three bears" to illustrate how fuzzy Chell's memory is was clever. Nice cliffhanger too! The scientists' dialogue was both understandable and vague enough to make one wonder what exactly they want. *reads on*

omg this is friggin awesome!

This fanfiction has gotten me hooked. I do feel sorry for Chell, always failing to escape though... Your pacing and narration is wonderful. I look forward to your next chapter!

~goldenphoenix30

Very nice ! this is my favorite portal fanfiction so far. Keep up the good work !

Awesome story! ilike the backstory your building on the foundation where it gives so little info. THAT takes skill. and you've got it.