Hi I really enjoyed this. It's nice to see a slightly deeper side to Two Bit as I never pictured him going steady with a girl. I liked the part when he bought her the book too. Update soon ! :)

Can't wait for more! Two-bit storys are awsome he's such a fun character!

Well it was a bit slow this chapter, and you have a few grammar mistakes, but nothing huge. Update soon.

Dude, I'n such an idiot for not reading this before! I've been off the internet for a while, trying to produce something meaningful. I've had several severe cases of writer's block. Enough about me. This story...wow. I loved the last part of the chapter. When she was like, "Okay" I think my heart broke. It's so sad! But I think you should still go on. It looks real promising! Again, sorry for not reviewing sooner.
loyal fan,
MB

Cool story can't wait for more!

Oh snap. Go back to Two-Bit! Go back to Two-Bit!


PS - you know you're missing a disclaimer, right?

Well, I must say I am interested. Most people don't tackle a relationship with Two-Bit and if they do, they tend to get him wrong. This one looks promising—you seem to have the canon characters' personality down so far and I like Bonnie so far. Plus, your grammar is decent and that's always a plus.

Just a few things. When the characters cut each other off don't end the dialog with a comma, end it with an ellipsis or a dash.

AND. I believe this: "... I would have one that small battle ..." should actually say: "... I would have WON that small battle ..."

Any questions you have, I'm sure I can help out with, but you seem to have a handle on it all.


Good luck with the rest of your fic and update soon. :)
-whatcoloristhesky