|Reviews for The Blood That Binds Us|
| Seriously Wrong 2/11/10 . chapter 1
I'm sorry, but you desperately need a beta reader. You have many spelling and grammar errors. Proof-read, proof-read, proof-read before you post or get someone to help you.
| darkamber 3/6/09 . chapter 1
I don't mean to flame, but is this a TV script or a story? And why is everything underlined? If it's meant to be a story maybe you could tell more by describing what's happening as well as using dialogue. I mean, what does Kara look like? And her daughter? Also, Natalie is a pathologist-she doesn't do tests on the living. NIck is a homicide cop. He only gets involved in kidnappings, etc., after the murder, not before. And an assault victim usually calls from the scene or has someone else do it. You might want to consider working with a beta. There are some nice ones available through the site. And your work would really benefit from spellchecker.