Oh. My. Gosh. I LOVED IT! WRITE MORE!

Jasper! How could you? You bastard! GRRRRRRRRRR!

It was a sad chapter.

Poor, poor Alice.

And once again, I say poor Alice.

Jasper... what have you done? Poor Alice.

Brilliant and great start. Poor Alice.

PLEASE put up chapter 8 again. I know you had one. I enjoyed that ending. :( This is such a wonderful story, superb job! I come back to read it every now and then along with You've Kept Me Waiting. Wonderful writing, I must say.

sooooooo...this is complete then?

welp.

i do hope you know im going to go to bed depressed...

but great writing.

Oh my goodness! Jaaper was a fucking dumbass!

This is the sickest fanfic I've ever read. I'm sorry. Jasper wouldn't be like that. It was basically rape. :'(

Oh. My. God. This is making me cry.

Fuck. That's all I can think right now. I don't normally swear in reviews, but I can't stop chanting Fuck, Fuck, Fuck in my head.

Firstly, you are a fucking amazing writer and you have such a talent, I'm literally in awe.

Secondly, I don't know whether to applaud you on this, or to ask you what was going through your mind. For some reason, I get the feeling, this was just something you kept on wondering about. What would it be like if one of the most loved books in the world had a sad ending?

Still.. him raping her? and then killing her? Edward and Rose killing him and Caine killing them?

All the same, you wrote Alice's POV amazingly and you got Aro, Marcus, all those bastards completely spot on.

It got a bit confusing in the 7th chapter when it goes to Edward's POV. I think your divider didn't appear.

Apart from that, I wish you well with this story and all the best in life. Your writing is really just fucking brilliant.

Shanii

I hope you already know that you are a talented writer.

I read "You've Kept Me Waiting" in one weekend - and it was amazing.

The problem in this story is not that it gloom and everybody dies an horrible miserable death - After this chapter it was clear that there will be no happy ending, and you write it well.

The problem is that as much as Alice is very belivable - Jasper is way too OOC:

Jasper will die before hurting Alice.

Jasper weakness was that he felt too much - he could never be numb.

His other weakness was Alice: He cannot stand anything bad happen to her, risking her or upsetting her.

As dramatic as it can be that he is the one who kill her -

It was more beliveable if it was the other way around that she will be the practical one and destroy him.

Jasper raping Alice was just too much. I kept looking for the newborn or someone else who controled Jasper - it was so not him - it ruined the story for me.

Wow. I don't even know if I like this story or not. I defibately love you as an author so your writing style is perfect and I appreciate this different, edgy ending compared to the original breaking dawn with the sappy, makes me want to puke happily ever after but Jasper and Alice? Noo why must they be torn appart T_T

Also I'm kinda confused on Jaspers thinking. I don't know if I believe that he could just stop loving Alice and cause her pain. Just a little puzzled there.

I keep waiting for a twist, that it's just a vision and Alice and Jasper are still on love and everyone is alive but I have a bad feeling that won't happen.

Please update soon!