I'm sorry, your an incredible author, and your writing is just superb, but this fanfiction is just too ooc for me! For people who like the characters going waay ooc then this is the story for them - but I have to be frank, I cannot bare this. So...completely and utterly ooc. Every single character...ooc. ooc. ooc.

Just to say; Aro's got black hair, not white XD lol

OMIGOSH THAT CAN'T HAPPEN!
OK, you;re a completely incredible writer, but that would just never, ever happen XP sorry

OMG...I SO hate this fic, but like it too...I dunno, I'm comfused like anything...
Its an incredibly well-written story, thats for sure, (as are all your stories)[And crediting KTBass too], but it was just so depressing..
I'm a really big Alice/Jasper fan, and i dont think such a terrible event could take place, that they could do this to each other, that Jasper could kill her with not so much as a last kiss. And AxJ are the most bonded couple of them all, they so totally depend on each other, and live for each other.
It was just so...SAD...The way they all die in the end, its so dark and gloomy...
But, its written very nicely, great descriptions, and its so Unexpected..
But I'm going to read some AxJ fluff now, like "Just Like Magic", which is more of my preference.
Thanks!

This story is really good! Also really sad, I was in tears when I read parts of it, but I loved it nonetheless. This was a really good story idea and a good replacement for canon.

It's amazing, incredible!

I'm shaking so far.

I had meant to review the previous chapters, but I was too caught up with the story to do so. But this chapter brought me to tears. I was literally hysterical, and the sad music I was listening to didn't help much either. Alice and Jasper are my absolute favorite characters and it pains me to see anything bad happen to either of them, and this chapter just killed me.
Thank you for writing such a meaningful and rare story, that causes your audience to connect and mourn for your characters. great job.

Oh hell...
That's the only thing I can say...Alice dead ? Jasper ?? OMG.
No happy ending ? Will there be a sequel or anyrhing ?

i just read this whole thing in the last coupla hours and now im in a state of shock! =o
i really like your writing style, i like how jasper was semi evil, i like the ending, i like how everyone dies! haha morbid much?
nice work!

Hey. I just read the first chapter and it's so good, though really sad. And now I'm gonna read chapter 2.

I much preferred that chapter to the last, I love Jasper but I didn't mind him dying here. And I like the last line too.

:0 What the Hale!?
This chapter almost brought me to tears, very sorry to say so, I didn't like the outcome. I enjoyed reading the other chapters, because - although they weren't all happy - I thought they were well written.

i knew it. i KNEW deep down that Jasper didn't really WANT to be evil like that!

Ye gods was this ever depressing. If there were an award for 'angstiest fic of the year' you'd win it hands down. I think this is the darkest Twific I've ever read.

By the way, you're right, the Breaking Dawn ending really blew.

Me again.

(Sorry for the Shakespear comparison, again, but...) If this fic was a Shakespear tradgedy this chapter would be Act 3 (the point in every one of his tradgedies where something signifigant happens that sets things in motion for the tradgedy to occur, sometimes called the point of no return). The bit where Jasper rapes Alice is the point of no return here because this is when Alice decides, once and for all, to kill herself and nothing can stop it.

Of course, you probably already knew that, but I thought I'd say it ayway :D

Your fan fic is AMAZING I am so adicted! You are a brilliant writter, keep it up!

Bye

P.S. Since the last comment I realised that you did, in fact, have a warning about the content. Sorry about that. You rock!