| Reviews for A Long Time Waiting |
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booky-true-false-identity 7/19/10 . chapter 8what have you done...? you killed them all? how could you? why? |
Sunny 7/5/10 . chapter 8 Ok, so let me first say that you are an excellent writer. Now let me tell you why... you pissed me the fuck off! I was so angry through most of the story, and isn't that the point of writing? To make people feel? Well you made me feel something alright. Jasper is my favorite character in the books and for you to make me hate him so much, I applaud you. |
leah 7/2/10 . chapter 7 goddammit...i'm crying. i...simply loved this. the tragic tale, the heartbreak... and you know what? FUCK all the other reviewers who spout bullshit about it being OOC and not possible - that's what fanfiction is, the chance to write things that didn't happen in the book/movie/etc. And I found this IC for both Alice and Jasper. I loved it beyond words, it moved me beyond words, I'm bawling. You have a rare gift. |
lucy 6/30/10 . chapter 8 god, this story is so heartbreaking. i feel so sorry for everyone (except for bella - god, how i hate her!), really, it's so sad. it's such an incredible story, so amazing. i loved it. i'm not sure if the story has ended or not, but i'd still love to see another chapter of this :) 10000/10. |
kiki.forever 6/24/10 . chapter 7I realized that chapter 8 wasn't your chapter and decided to write about your chapters alone. I'll admit I was very surprised when Jasper decided to follow through with the Volturi's plans and get a human pregnant. Even more surprised that he enjoyed it. Of course then I realized he was pretended they were Alice, but I was still disappointed. I knew all along that Jasper was doing all this for his wife - trying to safe her. I just thought he tell her before he killed her - tell her that he loved her. Of course then she'd regret dying and it would be even more difficult for Jasper to kill her. I'm still depressed, but I still think this story is amazing. Such drama, such woe. Simply brilliant, simply heartbreaking. Do you think you could make another chapter where Alice 'sees' all of this disaster happening in a vision. She could run over to Edward and say "No, don't! Don't have sex with Bella!" The chapter could even be named "PS 2: Sike! :p" Huh, huuuuhhh? It could work? Riiiiight? No? *Sigh* Dang. Anyway, my request still stands. Could you reply to one of my reviews (with maybe a suggustion on AlicexJasper fluff)? Thanks! :D |
kiki.forever 6/24/10 . chapter 8Ohmyfreaking gosh! I swear, I was crying. Sobbing. My heart was ripped from my chest! And for a writer to cause such intense feelings...damn you're an excellent writer. And I really wish I didn't read all your sweet, fluffy Alice and Jasper fics before I read this! Dang. Well, I need some serious fluff now. And I'll admit that I was absolutely HATING, no, LOATHING Jasper - and he's one of my favorite characters! Alice and Jasper were my favorite couple thanks to your other amazing stories! Not that this wasn't amazing, or anything. Because it truly was a great fic. I'm just really depressed now, lol. Man, Jasper can create some evil half-breds! The only reason why I'm even alive now is because Jasper kept the necklace he gave Alice. It makes me realize he loved her all along. He was just a soldier, trying to save his angel. Or was he... *Sighs* I'm kind of confused. Well, anyway... I would make a review for your other works, but my internet is crashed and I'm typing this all on my phone; which is taking me FOREVER. So I hope you respond to this; perhaps giving me a few suggustions on fluffy Alice & Jasper fics I can read. Great job, and sorry for the really long review! ;) Take care! |
Sony Boy 5/28/10 . chapter 8HOLY F*CK! I think I'm traumatized...*head desk* Oh my Word. I am going to need some seriously large amounts fluff, Smut, romance and M-rated fics after this. I don't know if I should praise you for the wonderful writing, emotional responses invoced and the vivid images or curse you for said vivid images and emotional responses and storyline. By the way, you haven't put 'complete' on this story. So I end this with a whole lot of HOLY F*CK! HOLY F*CK! HOLY F*CK! HOLY F*CK! HOLY F*CK! HOLY F*CK! HOLY F*CK! HOLY F*CK! while I try to get my mind around this. Dud3 I need coffee... |
HerEyesWereLikeJade 5/16/10 . chapter 8I have read all chapters all after each other. It is such a beautiful tragedy and I love how you portraited Alice. Even though she is not the happy Alice from before, she still is really Alice. The emotions are strong and I sometimes felt like crying. I don't really understand Jasper's feelings, though; I found him out-of-character. Still I love how you wrote this - there were almost no typos, and that's something I love. The language isn't too hard either, which is really nice to read since I'm not English/American/whatever. I really.. well, not enjoyed reading such a sad story, but I liked it. Thanks for sharing it. |
moonhoney2 5/6/10 . chapter 8Amazing story. but so sad. :-( |
moonhoney2 5/6/10 . chapter 6No you didn't! *cries* |
Tashibi 5/4/10 . chapter 7 OMG I am crying so much, Alice was my favorite, but your writing is excellent, please write more fanfics! |
loubylou96 4/10/10 . chapter 2I loved this whole story, wonderfully written, but the rape was a bit irrelevant. I know it was a huge chunk of your story, and that you didn't describe it in as much graphic detail as some pedos would have liked, but it just creeped me out. Also, I really don't think Jasper would have become a mind controlling demon just like that and destroyed Alice. It was clear in the twilight saga that he loved her and she had changed his life for the better. I loved the last chapter, Caine is certaintly a character I would never like to meet. Overall a brilliant story with a ok plot, made me cry. Thanks. |
dukman 2/15/10 . chapter 8Majorly devolves in the final chapter. What occurs with Caine is irrelevant, makes no sense, and does not fit with the rest of the fic. We apparently make a time-jump, and everyone is dead. Great. I don't mind things like that, except it was so utterly pointless. The inclusion of Caine as a soul-snatcher is not believable. For me, Chapter 7: It's over. Chapter 8 doesn't exist. |
TheGreenElephant911 1/22/10 . chapter 7Okay, okay, okay. I'll just spit it out. Jasper seemed... SO out of character in these chapters, yet you made it so it was him. That's a gift (If you understood what I just said, cause i didn't). GEEZE! I don't think Jasper would turn into a cold-blooded vampire guy that you made him out to be, because just... I can't explain it, but in the third book, he told us how and why he liked hunting animals and not humans. Humans, he could feel their emotions, their pain when he bit into them like a delicious red apple. I can't quite remember (I personally HATED Eclipse, I only like Jasper's story and Alice in it, so I only read it once) but he tried to stop eating once. So it just seemed so out of character when you wrote that he was (maybe) enjoying himself and getting into the whole origional vampire thing. But the creepy thing is (In a good way, don't get me wrong!), you made it seem like he would act that way and go back to crimson eyes. The story was amazing, tears showed up in my eyes twice, I basically LOVED the overall feeling (I love it when stories get to me), and it basically made me totally mad and feeling hate towards everyone. So, good job! |
TheGreenElephant911 1/22/10 . chapter 8Even though I added this to my favorites, this story made me very sad and ANGRY. Ugh! This was really well written. |