I fell upon this story by chance, and I'm quite glad I did. While this story isn't really a BtVS story (more of an inspired by vampires story), I was prepared for that and found it enjoyable. Thanks.

This is a nice story, though it might have worked better as an original story. It would have been better if you'd fit in a cameo of a character on the show or one of the topics specific to the show. Like say, ... a Slayer, or anything like that. Even just in mentioning.