another chapter finished finally.anyway great great chapter.

Awesome story...I love the Ash/Dawn stuff. Please update soon.

It's great that you finally updated, keep up the great work. I am really liking this story.

Wicked Story!

Great chapter, although I wonder if Ash is still going to capture Turtwig in your story like in the canon, also will May still have a Glaceon dispite the fact that she doesn't have Eevee with her? Anyway keep up the good work.

It was a good chapter, a bit short though, update soon!

awesome

heres something you can use to create tension

have him think cynthia is 'good looking' :)

great chapter can't wait to see the next one.

This is GREAT! Please, Please, update soon!

Excellent chapter, I was thinking about Arial using a Vibrava, Porygon or its evolved form (Porygon II). Update soon.

I think Arial could use a Noctowl, or maybe Staravia. Her names just sounds like she should use a Flying-type. Oh, and good chapter!

How about a Raichu as a shiny Pokemon.

Does that work for you?

I hope you update soon.

great chapter and ariel should have a blastoise or swampert that know aqua jet aqua veil water gun and hydro blast

This story is great! Also, perhaps Calvin could use a Luxio?

yay i'm glad that my people appeared in this but Metamantis was your creation so i can't take all the credit and also calvin should have a Feraligator named gator that knows hydro pump,aqua ring,safeguard,and metal claw.I really enjoyed this chapter.thanks again for putting in my people i made up.(o^_^o)-PIKA