"That's just it!" Kiba sneered, "he is the center of your world, Hinata! While I, your teammate, am nothing more to you than a lap dog - like Akamaru!"

^That was great. I love how you portrayed Kiba, so angry about how Hinata is infatuated with Naruto, but she's just to lazy to see that Kiba is right there in front of her. Beautiful.

I hope you do well with the contest.