Is it me or are you purposefully leading my eyes on withyour longlongsentenceswithoutmuch(pause, breath)breaksinbetween?

A 3-liner mini paragraph was a single sentence~? O.o

But, you know what? It's kind of effective towards the end! Considering the circumstance Nanoha was in, her continuous, almost insistant droning monologue was fitting. It's like she's explaining to herself with an almost detached desperation, running through what she already know but can't really stop/help. The repition made it felt like she's in some kind of denial... Uh doh.

Alas, it made me finish reading that much faster. Although I doubt I would appreciate a 10k-worded fic with a writing style like that. It felt a little like you were squeezing, as much as possible, many points into a coherent sentence.

Or it could just mean that I read too damn fast. Skipping over your painstakingly detailed sentences... Muahaha!

Great work anyways, I hope I wasn't too out of point :P

i cant believe you killed them both. i can agree with you that making someone depressed with fanfiction is fun but you killed Nanoha and Fate.

* RAGES at character deaths*

This one I kind of saw coming after the first incident. Two things are left me curious though. 1. Who is narrating this? (It's actually something I do with my characters but it's from persepective. This looks like an outside one.) 2. The title...4 to 1, how is that derived? Fate took a hit 3 times here unless you include the one in As that would be 4. The 1? Where is that coming from?

Anyway, nice fic. Congrats on your first main kill. :P

Wow, Fay.

Too intense.

...Painful.

But amazing.

Hey, Eli. Long time no see. XD

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Stronza, per favore. (Bit ch, please.)

You KILLED...Fate-chan?

Oh, but it was chilling and well written so I'm torn between tearing your head off and hugging you.

Though it would be, like Enraptured said, a vicious cycle.

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Makes me wonder if it'd be worth it...

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No more fics...Egh. No. The world needs you.

Your A/N tells me you're a definite sadist, Eli. And En's outburst is as hyper as always..

And forced my foot. This does not seem forced. -o-

-Aki

Oh, wow...that's just...horrible in the greatest way, if you get what I mean. The details put into this this are just...amazing. It's kind of like...Well...going through what Nanoha was going through...in that amazing and constant spin...dizzying motions, you know?

And so..so...good.

*Cries* ;_;

Omg, it was so GOOD, even though it was so SAD ;_;

Beautifully written, even if it also broke my heart XD

~Yuri-hime~

HAHA it's me again. I just remembered that I forgot something very important!


A BIG HUGE THANKS FOR THE FIC. xD HAHAHA THANK YOU SO MUCH. (You made my night!)
Hey I just thought of a lame joke:

Arigatou, Arigatou Sheitarou.

^ Which is not funny. And really facepalm-worthy. But still. I tried. xD


Bah, I'm so annoyed that I no longer get the first review now that I'm back in school and online less and all. D:

PS: LOOK I fed your soul twice! :D
PPS: Seriously, thanks. :P

- Enraptured :D :D :D

WHAT THE HELL I WANT TO KILL YOU NOW!?

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NO I /STILL/ WANT TO KILL YOU.

Seems that lately your fics make me speak aloud to myself while staring at the screen, because I just went "WHUT!? What did I do now!", while frantically backtracking to all the reviews I wrote AND FINDING NOTHING OUT OF THE ORDINARY / FINDING NOTHING DESERVING A DEPRESSION -_-

Edit: Ooh I just read all the recent reviews by (strike)all your rabid fans(slash strike) everyone else and I still don't see anything, so you're going to have to explain that :P *poke poke*

Anyway. Your A/N killed my depressed mood xD POOF from angsty to outraged / amused. So the depression failed, HAH. xD Going on to attempt to comment anw, so if it turns out crappy it's your fault.

- I love the long sentences, impactful much? Very effective way of expressing Nanoha's jumbled thoughts.
- I love the style in general okay!!
- I love your stuff. Blah.
- Why did you write angst ):
- YOU SHOULD WRITE ME ANOTHER ONE THAT'S HUMOUR OR FLUFF! :D Or smth kinky. *snickers*
- YOU KILLED FATE YOU MORON. ):

(I feel like I'm doing a review / commentary on some literature passage thing.)

Heehee I was all :D and D: when I got the alert. :D cause it was a fic from YOU and D: cause the summary made it obvious that (1)Fate would die -_- and (2) it was going to be ANGST, surprise, surprise.




PS: Fay!Fangirl-mode: HEHEHE I GOT A FIC I GOT A FIC! xD YOU'RE AWESOMEZXZXZ. I'd kill you but that would mean no more fics from you and then your Rabid Fans would kill me ): ): ): It's a vicious cycle. xD

M...this was...really...I'm not sure what's the word...

Chilling? Yes...It was chilling...in a very good way.

It was nice to receive this one shoot and to kow that Melody's almost done, you really are writing faster now, and what's better you seem happier now, I hope that you're doing fine there ^^

About the fic, I don't think I need to say it, but it was beautiful and well written as always. I usually don't like fics about this pairing with bad ends but this one was fine in my opinion. Dying for love, and losing everything when you lose your loved one is a beautiful and meaningful way to die (but this doesn't mean that you should do it! xD). The last scenes were great.

I'll be looking forward to your next update. Please update soon. You're great~

Wow, you're just on a roll aren't you. All this time and then BAM! New stories and chapters are out. Depressing fic, but your A/N made me laugh, so it's all good...kind of. :D

I'm pretty sure a part of me died while reading this. Thanks, Eli. You killed half of me. ;P

But it was otherwise awesome. As always.