I really like this. I was looking for some good KOTOR fic, and I'm glad I found this! You have a good handle on the characters, so that they feel true to the source. It's neat to see Revan struggling with finding out who she was, and Carth with loving her. I think making her a little dark side makes it really interesting too. I loved the bits with Canderous and HK.

I truly enjoy your writing style. It's subtle and yet you can still see their emotion. They act more, 'human' then overly done. It's a great grasp on how people truly act then how we want them to. This writing style of you reminds me of my own in a few ways. At least in how I play how my characters. I used to write on here under a different, but my muse comes and goes and my 'kidney stone of a writer's block' tends to stay longer. I love to see where this is going. Please continue.

Hey, love this so far! Not nearly enough DSF Rev stories out there. Looking forward to the next chapter!

I try to hold back on the "Great job! Can't wait for the next chapter!" kinda comment, but this is really, really nice writing. There's a minimalist quality to it. Both the exposition and the dialogue are very clear, direct and smooth - I guess you could say it's soft-spoken. I like how the emotions aren't overdone either; there's mostly just a subtle hint of what's below the surface. Your lines are both simple and beautiful.

So.. awesome job :)

(There've been DSF/Carth stories before, but they're definitely less common than the LSF ones.)