Cool, very cool. I like how you're making things happen. One question though.

Will Demmy be a darker and more sinister character as he uses the Death Note, or will he be kind and understanding?

I personally am sick of goody-two-shoes characters, and I'm interested in where your OC is going to go. Its your choice, but I'm interested.

This is so cool.

I don't know what else to say. I've been waiting for a story like this to pop up, and i really like it. I will be following this story along, and I'm awaiting another chapter ASAP!

This is really good. I like how your developing the characters, letting the story develop fully rather than rushing through, which seems to happen a lot. This is an interesting story, I like the concept a lot. A third Kira, one who doesn't really like to kill, per say. And he's friends with Light. Hm, this will be intersting. I can't wait for more!