The story was great. But one drawback is that each chapter was too long, so its better if you divide it into parts. Anyways, check out my story, Delta Warfare, from my profile.

Zac this is one hell of a good story, please do write next chapter soon and don't leave it as a cliff hanger.

Oh also this is now a favorite story of mine, you truly are an excellent writer. Keep it up.

- A fellow author 1stlist

I really enjoyed reading this. The only thing I would change is take the other parts of the story and make them additional chapters instead of five seperate stories.