 Hieiko 2009-11-25 . chapter 1This is a really interesting idea. I can't wait to see where you'll go with this. |
 theTwilightLamb 2009-08-14 . chapter 1I really liked it and it would be great if you could update. I loved it! :) |
 skywalker05 2009-03-09 . chapter 1Haha, I see my mindtrick worked!
While I try to use it sparingly, present tense worked here, sacrificing nothing while amping up the emotion.
You're very good at telling events through dialogue instead of just descriptive pose, and the slipping in of Obi-Wan's death was quite creepy for its subtlty, its assumption that the characters make but the reader never would. This is a frightening AU because it is a dark side of the "good guys" winning. |
 ILDV 2009-03-09 . chapter 1Intersting, very interesting but... PLEASE No mention BailDala. |
 FutureOscarWinner94 2009-03-07 . chapter 1wow, i lyked the 1st version, but this one is truly 10x's better! :) |
 pronker 2009-03-07 . chapter 1Excellent reworking and you know I'm going to say, Post! Post! I really like this tension and sense of things unsaid, filling in the gaps as we readers must. Since Bail hasn't the Dark Side (Does he??) his rule will be more to our understanding, should you continue this very dark and fascinating U. There is another politically based series of stories by cupiscent and calicokat on LJ that I enjoy, too, and this series of yours is extremely well done, too. |
 TheMacUnleashed 2009-03-07 . chapter 1Great job! I love seeing the different side of Bail. I mean, usually to make him so dark would just scream OOC, but this is fascinatingly in-character. |
 lp4mu 2009-03-07 . chapter 1I love this fic. The writing is so good that you can feel the emotions of the characters.
I am glad that you came back to and I would love to read more fics in the same vein. |
 ObiBettina7 2009-03-07 . chapter 1An very interesting AU. I look forward to more - especially more backround (how did Obi-Wan die, why aren't Anakin and Padme married etc.)
So please post the other stories you have for this time line too.
And as always update soon! |
 Force Child 2009-03-07 . chapter 1Great, fantastic, unbelievable! I'd say you've captured my attention. I love your story. Please, please post the rest. I'll be anxiously awaiting more. Want to know where the story is headed. (think I have an idea what's going to happen, but I'll keep that to myself - want to find out if I'm right)You should post this on the site I told you about. Email me for name of it. You get alot more feedback there than here. You could also post original stories too. Who knows, maybe you can have an ebook made. |