This was a good one-shot.

I did find some grammatical mistakes. In the sentence, "Thinking it was all a joke you indulged him...", "you" should be replace with "he". Another grammatical mistake I caught was "embarasses", which needs to be replaced with "embarassed".

Otherwise, good work.

-Aria Breuer

ROFL

I quite enjoyed it, but please give me the pleasure of saying this.

Ahem. YOUR MOTHER WAS A HAMSTER, AND YOUR FATHER SMELT OF...EL-DERBERRIES!

haha no it rocked

-Rose

Okay, so the Occasional David Bowie Stand-in was my favorite part. Mmhmm.

Nice. Doesn't Sarah realize she's all over Youtube already? I almost wanted Jareth to ask a retorical question and guy from scene 24 to fall off the bridge because he didn't know the answer. It's still okay that he didn't. Okay, now get some sleep!