 KLCtheBookWorm 2009-03-09 . chapter 1Nothing against the pairing and it's not badly written. But you don't give a sense of how long it has been since the Eclipse. I just don't see these two developing the flirty banter unless it's been a while--like a few annuals. It seems very soon into the aftermath, and it seems too soon for them to be this way with each other. |