|Reviews for Through Muggleborn Eyes: Year Two|
| September And Summer 2/17/13 . chapter 20
Great again!:) Just as good as the other one i read:D
| emcee31 2/3/11 . chapter 14
You don't happen to know the tune for that Valentine, do you? :)
| emcee31 2/3/11 . chapter 12
Peeves sticking HER tongue out at Harry? Aslip, or a change of character?
| emcee31 2/3/11 . chapter 9
What DID cause those scorch marks? I've always wanted tyo ask JKR that.
| Chellendora 5/5/10 . chapter 20
Another good year. I think this one was done better than the last, showing that you're really getting the hang of it. You're doing a good job telling the story from Bryt's point-of-view without making her more the hero than Harry. My only plot-wise problem was that the last two chapters seemed very anti-climatic...All that building up to it and then skipping to the recovery. I would maybe write out Harry's story a bit more about finding out about Tom being Voldemort and his fight with the Basilisk? Since I know that Bryt couldn't be there in the chamber with him. Again, the only technical errors I saw were a few awkward sentences, though those were very few. And I barely saw any misspellings at all. And of course, "Argog." xD I'm going to start reading year three soon; it's my favorite of the books so I can't wait! Me Remus! :D
| JJ Rust 5/14/09 . chapter 20
So ends Year Two. Good job of handling Bryt's confusion at the beginning. I also like how she had so much satisfaction over Lockhart's messed up memory.
I think this got wrapped up a bit too quickly. The last half really lent itself to putting Bryt more in the spotlight, especially with her reunion with Hermione. I really would have liked to have seen that part expanded, since those two are best friends, and maybe have her do some introspection about her second year at Hogwarts on the train ride home.
Overall, good job on the story. Compliments again on creating a very believable and interesting OC in Bryt Watkins.
| JJ Rust 5/13/09 . chapter 19
I guess it's safe to say Bryt's little crush on Lockhart is history. Good job showing her anger at Lockhart as it fully hits her that he's a fraud.
Great beginning to this. You didn't have to delve deep into anyone's head to show how upset they were over Ginny's abduction. The group's physical reactions spoke volumes.
Looking forward to the next chapter.
| JJ Rust 5/7/09 . chapter 18
Good one. I think the last part could have benefitted from some thoughts by Bryt as she sees Lockhart crumble when the teachers tell him to go tackle the basilisk. I'd imagine that would utterly end any lingering crush feelings Bryt would have for the wanker.
A couple typos I caught: "will like in the Chamber forever" should be "will lie in the Chamber forever."
"We shall have to sent all the students . . ." should be "We shall have to send all the students . . ."
Look forward to the next chapter. I'd really like to see Bryt become completely turned off by Lockhart.
| JJ Rust 5/5/09 . chapter 17
Good one. I liked the way you had Bryt empathize with Ron's plight with the acromantulas. And her trying to put herself in his shoes by imagining giant rats instead was priceless. Bryt would be the logical choice to figure out it's a basilisk with Hermione on the DL (pardon my sports reference) since she is big into Magical creatures.
Typos I caught: "it could have been was her own fear causing it." Eliminate the "was."
"to not harm Hagrid" should be "do not harm Hagrid"
"Hagrid probably though they wouldn't harm us" should be "thought" instead of "though."
"what have e found out" should be "what have we found out."
Good job. Looking forward to the next installment.
| JJ Rust 4/30/09 . chapter 16
Good job. I thought you handled Bryt's reactions going through the forest very well. Anyone would be uneasy in that situation. I also liked her response to Malfoy's stupid comments. Sometimes either ignoring someone or giving them a "whatever" gets on their nerves more than a string of insults.
One typo I caught. "only feeling in" should be "only filling in."
Keep on writing. BTW, I put the links to your stories on the Reviews Lounge. Hopefully that'll get you more readers. Or, if you leave a review for someone else's story, you can always ask them to check out your stuff. That's how I've gotten a bunch of reviews for my stuff.
Have a good one.
| JJ Rust 4/28/09 . chapter 15
Good job handling Bryt's reaction to Hermione being petryfied. You can definitely feel her worry. Also, good stuff with the gang picking their classes, and Bryt catching Harry with some "friendly fire." Bryt's grousing over picking subjects for next year just makes her feel so much like a real 12-year-old girl.
| JJ Rust 4/23/09 . chapter 14
Once again, Bryt comes off as a more believable character as she really starts to get annoyed with Harry and Hermione's obsession over the diary. Also, some good scenes there with Bryt scolding Ron for his inapporpriate comments. As if Hermione wasn't bad enough with her hen-pecking, now Ron has to face a tag-team.
Some typos I caught: "do everyone one-handed" should be "do everything one-handed"
"did chick it" should be "did chuck it"
"an aware for special services" should be "an award for special services"
Props for the way you have developed Bryt. She is by no means a Mary Sue, nor does she overshadow the Trio. She has really begun to fit in naturally with them.
| JJ Rust 4/21/09 . chapter 13
Good one. I really liked the way you captured Bryt's fascination with the stuff in Dumbledore's office and her enthusiasm at watching Fawkes burst into flames. Again, it just adds more to her character.
Hermione likes teddy bears? There's a heck of a twist.
Good, believable sentiment from Bryt at the end. Who wants to do all that work and take all those risks and get bubkis at the end.
Keep on writing.
| JJ Rust 4/16/09 . chapter 12
I really liked that you showed doubt in Bryt's mind about Harry being the heir of Slytherin. That and how Harry speaking Parseltongue gave her the creeps makes her character more believable. Funny bit too with Bryt dragging Harry out of the Common Room to find Justin. Just another example of how she can be such a hothead.
Two typos I caught: "a string if eerie hissing" should be "a string of eerie hissing."
"You could have saying anything" should be "You could have said anything"
| JJ Rust 4/14/09 . chapter 11
Great job with the dueling club bit. Yeah, it went pretty much as I expected with Bryt. Why use a wand when you can use the old 5-knuckle shuffle?
You definitely have Bryt using her head in this one, thinking things through before acting. Probably comes from all the time she's spent around Hermione. Much as she'd want to help, she would give herself away as a disguised Slytherin.
If there's one thing I would have liked added it's Bryt's thoughts regarding Colin being attacked. Obviously she's not a fan of Colin's, but I'm sure she wouldn't want to see the poor kid harmed and would feel bad for him.
Good job. Keep on writing.