Pretty good so far. You have the characters down pretty well. Hopefully you'll update soon.

Also, Tommy's dad's name is Micheal.

I think you should continue!

Poor Tommy

Like yeah, you should continue the story

Continue it! I need to know how everyone else will react, and Poor Tommy of course.

I can't really give a full opinion on your writing unless you continue, but I would very much like to read more of your story! Good work for your first time out!

I would like to read more of this stroy. What tpye of cancer dose Tommy have? I so do hope you contuie with this story.