aw poor Rose, good story

Great job.
You might want to re read and check your spelling and grammar. You have a couple typos, like Hack, instead of Jack, and misword use such as "save" and "safe"

Please dont take these the wrong way.

Also the story is kinda hard to follow at times. The begining was a bit confusing to read even though ive seen the deleted scenes before.

I love the last line. So powerful... Great job.