I like how you put in realistic details, like the uncomforts of a corset and Sakura's hands getting hurt from pulling the chain. It makes it easier to relate to the characters with such details, no matter how insignificant they may seem.
And lol for the monologing :3 Some people like to hear their own voices too much, and doctors do have that tendency more often ;)

Hmm.. I dont remember who Silver is, or what world Citadel was.
But good job on completing book one. PM me when you start the second one.

Lol a flirty Fai is so sexy *sniggers* now, hurry up and write the next book! :D

I'm still here! I haven't reviewed this story in a long time, but since I was late for all your stories I'll review now. Why is Fai such a flirt in your mind? :P Look at what you've done to me. I can't see Fai with anyone but Masooma anymore. Thank you for writing!

When he wasn't busy prancing around or draping himself on other people or objects. . . . *giggles* nice piece of subdued Fai X hissy Maddy interaction :D and again. . . . poor Fai T_T I wonder what you're gonna do with Xahra next o.o

Fai is impossible

Ontising! True;y, I cant wait to read more! But the thought of Fai dying is killing me! Gah!

Wait, was that from Enchanted? O.o That song is really too easy to butcher, poor Kurogane XD

Also, Maddy really is in for getting some extra cold shoulders from now on, running outside without even her underwear on XD I'm actually surprised nobody commented on her state of undress. Even if a child has gone missing, people would comment if you would join the group in the nude right? And the way she ran out was rather equivalent for nude in the Victorian era :P

Now I just wonder... How much will Maddy remember from this dream? Will she remember snippets, nothing, or will she remember having a dream at all?

Maddy's song XD it reminded me of that song in the movie Enchanted :P overall, this chappy was very interesting. Nice (y)

Fai inspires many ideas how to kill him

I'm still here!

Corsets, yay!
I have a few technicalities on corsets for you ;) Have you ever worn one? Because while they indeed make breathing a little harder, it's hardly the worst part of wearing a corset. Your breathing gets more shallow, but breathing through your chest instead of belly remains perfectly available, and thus not that big of a problem as long as you don't start running, jumping and screaming. The bigger problem lies in your innards getting squeezed together like a meat pie. You can't eat or drink normal quantities without feeling overfull, even though you are still very hungry. You feel constricted and squashed and every available cavity may start making weird noises in the process of moving (or staying still, for that matter). On the long term it makes your back and hips hurt because of the weight and stress of the corset, and the hungry-stomach matters only get worse the longer you wear the dreaded thing. If you keep moving about or don't get enough fresh air, you're going to feel prone to fainting and too warm.
Secondly, Maddy makes it look very easy to pull her hair in a bun (even if she doesn't succeed). I would expect her to complain at least once about how difficult it is to raise your arms above your head while wearing a corset. To put your arms up that high your torso stretches, which is not that easy while wearing a corset. The thing inhibits all movement in general. Don't ever drop anything on the floor while wearing a corset, 'cuz you'll never be able to reach it again.
But all in all, yes they DO make you pretty :3 No way to feel more feminine than to wear a tight-laced corset. Which means you'll feel very fat the moment it comes off again, but never mind that...

So far my detailed constructive criticism on corset-wearing. I still love the story, I adored the previous chapter although I'd liked to have seen a bit more of the complications of suddenly changing gender ;) Please update this soon too!

I will be nice and give you my comments through review Mind you, this means you'll have to write more to compensate for all my trouble ;)

My first reaction on the prologue was: Is this fic rated correctly? I've always had a bit of trouble with the line between T and M (when is it just hinting and when has it become explicit?), but with your interesting descriptions of corpses I would have chosen for M myself...
During the second chapter I had to laugh a little, thinking that knowing some spoilers for this story made SOME comments majorly funny when they would have been a little socially awkward otherwise :P Funny thing: I had expected Maddy to be different from this with the picture I've seen and the spoilers I've read. Still, this chapter gives a very nice introduction to your OCs, and together with their pictures I think I'll have no trouble with them at all in this story - even though I normally don't like OCs.
I like the writing overall, but by now I wouldn't be expecting anything less from you

I just shouldn't have started reading for the reason of being too sick to do anything useful... The corpses weren't a problem, but my upset stomach started churning when I reached the noodles -.-

*insert maniacal cackle here* Poor poor Xahra... She's in for a beating I just know it. I wouldn't be so worried if it was just Maddy she had to fend of but Kurgy-wurgy too? Damn she better be a fast runner. Or find a way to get around the ninja's superior defense and cat like reflexes but we all know Kurgz is way too cool to get beaten up by a girl... no matter how hilarious it would be... oh oh... make him chase her and run into a tree and get buried. Or would Maddy be more likely to do that? XD Anyway. Love the story so far! Please update soon. I have suspicions about the other canons that you've been slipping in here and there and I am determined to find out if my spidy-sense is correct in assuming that Edward Elric is Maddy's Grampa. Right so update soon or I'll find you... Bwahahaha.

P.S. Please don't think I'm crazy. I'm really not. I'm just in a really good mood today!

I'm still reading it! XD I like this story, it's very interesting and out of the norm for Tsubasa fanfictions. It's great! I'm glad you finally updated and it was a good update too! Thanks!