Oh. My. GOD.

You are AMAZING! I bow down before your amazing writing skills!

Where did you get the inspiration? What made you think of this? It was, quite truly, the most original story I have ever read.

I'm writing something similar - haven't published it yet. It's about Sara, and Catherine, when they were children; there is a sinister project going on in Vegas that abducts children from the streets, and the children are never seen again.

I'd love to tell you more about it, but then I'd have to kill you. :P

You know how, in the third season, Grissom started going deaf? Well, reading the entire story in passive form was like that. Like you can see it all, right in front of you, but you can't hear it. When Greg's name was called out, it was like a slap in the face - sudden and shocking.

I loved this story. It's such a pity it was a one-shot, because I'd have truly loved to see it evolve into a full-length story.

AKA Quin

First of all, I did like this, which I expected because it's hard not to like everything you write. This story, like everything else I've read of yours, was very well-written. That said, I definitely didn't like it as much as most of your other stuff. I think part of the reason was the lack of dialogue. Overall, I really think that 'show, not tell' would have helped. That said, the material was dark, so I can understand why you didn't want to describe everything happening. Still, it just didn't feel as deep because a large part of the story was described in relatively little detail. I think it would be better if it were described as it happened, rather than a quick summary of Greg's experiences after the fact.

Still, it was well-written. Strong imagery as usual, and the ending was quite clever. I'm curious as to why this didn't end up in your Wendigo story series.

that was dark!

brilliant, but dark.

im not sure if there is anything missing, i loved the descriptiveness, and the reference to the wendingo which did help clear up a few things for me.