i love the concept!
definitely would like to see how things will turn out...

I love the way you characterized Cid! "Tell Eclip that if it gets too ugly, that if he needs a hand, that I'll give him a foot."

"A hand Cid"

"Well that too."

Loved this!

I don't know much about canon FFVII and most of what I do know comes from wikipedia so you might want to try that. I like the way you've characterized Tifa and Sephiroth so far though :)

Interesting start! I can't wait to see what happens next...especially when Cloud returns.

You do have a few things that need correcting...

In the first paragraph it should be "At the hospital" instead of "At hospital" and "He then was on close watch on her" would sound better if it was written "Afterwards he kept a close watch on her"

In the second paragraph "Tifa insisted" sounds better than "said Tifa."

After the first scene break, first paragraph, "there was no sign of the living for the past three hours." sounds better than "there had been no sign of living for the past three hours."

23rd paragraph from the page-break: "which stood out starkly against the stranger's porcelain skin" sounds better than "which stood out alot in the stranger's porcelain skin"

In that same paragraph "extra more slowly" doesn't sound right, try "extra slowly" or "more slowly" but not both.

I really hope you do continue this and don't get discouraged :D

lol what's Sephiroth gonna do now?

This is good! I loved it, can't wait to read the next chapter. I espeially loved the cheesecake part(s):D one question, thought. Why doesn't Sehpiroth just change his hair or clothes or something? That way he wouldn't be as reconasiable. Wait, he probably will, won't he? Am I spoling the plot or something? lol :D

That's a pretty good start, Tifa's lack of memory and the convenient situation for Sephiroth.

Hope to see more, till now I must say the characters are very in char, I just didn't catch the "eclipse" thing, but on general, it's well written, (♥) don't worry and get your imagination flow! (>8D I wanna read the next chap!)

Oh, please do continue!
Please add romance (hehehe)..
You don't need to a change a thing; it's good.
Please write more SephTi fics~! U_U

UPDATE!

i haven't red sumfing this gud in awhile!!

update!