Lemon!
Pls continue this... I realy like this story and want to know what happens next TT.TT

Dear Double,

I like this article very much，and I want to translate it into Chinese.Would you please give me a special permission to reproduce this article ?

Thank you very much.

yours,
Cactilaw

Wow, your fic has an amazing plot! I love how it's structured, and the scenes with HisoIllu were always hot! xD BigSEED and Sleepyxin highly recommended your fic to me and I can see why, the plot is simply addictive. I hope you update soon and not keep ur readers waiting~

^_^

As for concrit, I do have some suggestions, although it could be just me. :P IMO the first chp contained too much exposition for an opening chp, although it was well plotted. It lost me a couple of times there... I wonder if that scene could be improved by making it a scene instead? with Gon and Killua also present, Illu initially having no interest in killing Gon at all, probably just viewing him as a mildly entertaining puppy dog but the obvious attraction of Hiso and Killua for Gon ( plus you can make Machi suddenly appear to add fuel to fire ) suddenly triggered long dormant emotional sensations ( also known as jealousy for us normal human beings ) in his body, if he can't verbalize it, you could show him doing something mildly aggressive, that he would normally nevr do, such as torturing a client longer than necessary etc, then the notion of him wishing to kill Gon gaining obsessive power over him. That would make his emotional stake high enough to overcome his inhibitions about killing Gon - I mean, you already wrote even Silva was against the hit on GOn - so how can Illu reconcile the image of himself as elite Zaoldyeck rolemodel with his own irrational, less than noble need to erase a 12 yr old boy in order to gain the attention of a...lover?! And I guess some flashbacks to the reasons *why* Illu would love/lust for Hisoka would also make Illu's emotions more convincing, at least from my POV. Anyways, just some concrit that sprang to mind, hope they help! I can see many readers are loving your fic tremendously so update soon! ^^

OH MY GOD!!I love this story!I like the way you described in hiso/illu
And for killa's message shall believe that Gon didn't die but ony hurt?
He's such a cute boy I don't want anyone to die actually, so please? Let the boy alive.
And if so, I think possibly hisoka had already know it and use this as a chance to get illumi himself~haha~~
come on~ come on~next chapter~I can't wait anymore~

WOW! This is so interesting! Me likey Hisoka/Illumi. And, omg, you killed Gon D: Poor Killua! Seriously, update please. PLEASE.

Hisoka is really intimidating haha. XD

The part where Illumi "sorta" confessed was really cute. I can't help but giggle a little. :))

I wonder what'll happen between Illu and Killua. I can't wait!

YOSH!

This chapter was filled with all the drama and the slight yaoi that im into.
HIsoka x Illumi is indeed the best!!

I cant wait for more..

and I am wondering..COuld hisoka be really just tricking Illumi into his trap? Or is he really genuine? Coz so far all hisoka did is lure Illumi into his trap..so i wanna see..it would be really cute if Hisoka in his turn also truly loved Illumi :p!

Anyway..please update soon
peace~

I really like the idea you have going here whit Illumi and Hisoka. But I do hope that Gon isnt dead just injured.

oh wow..Gon dies! XD The battle was fierce, smart, original, and fast. i liked that..i dont like reading really long fight scenes so this was good..

Now i cant wait to find out what happens with hisoka..andpoor Killua what is he gunna doXD his best frend is now gone :p

Oh my! its been a while since the last time i read a HisoIllu..this one is really interesting. Using Gon as an idea..i found that origina. Hisoka doesnt want to fight Illumi because hed simply want to keep him by his side..but Illumi i suppose doesnt want that? I really like this story so far..:D

I dont care if gon dies or not..i just want to see were this goes between Hisoka and Illumi.

Btw..that scene were Illumi fell on top of HIsoka. I gota give u credit for that nice fluffy scene. It was amazing XD! hehe..I always like reading and writing Hisoka x Illumi..they just seem like a perfect couple.

peace~

wa AWESOME! plase update son X3

wow, is gon dead? (i seriously wouldn't mind!)
well, seems like slowly time is coming for hisoka to show up... whee, can't wait x3

Wa. Whoa. Gon died! Cool haha! OMG. I wonder what Hisoka will do when he finds out. XD

Update please. XD

OMG! so this was why someone wanted Gon Dead!
the fight was awesome and intense! the ending surprising! the description strong!
and now, I am more than curious and thrilled to read the rest!
Illumi is so dead! I want to see that! or anything you have in store!

that is a very good story!
I don't even know what Hisoka could choose between the two sides of his life if he were to have only one apple!

I am impatient to read the rest! awesome!