A great story. Very good.

The story seems a little stilted but you are young and you learn by doing. What is a Monkey Dairy? Is it a place where monkeys get their milk or is it a monkey named Dairy? A little more description will make your story much richer. Can't wait to read more. I've always been rather fond of the flying monkeys. If you've read the book there is a whole detailed story in there about how the monkeys became enslaved. If you haven't read it I highly recomend that you do.