good story

Wow that was amazing loved every letter and word and bla bla bla of it its romantic with a nice end, abit of blood and gore here and there from the later chapters and a great story line yay but sad about Yukari.

So, I kind of wish that you would make a sequel. xD

I'm very disappointed. The ending was rushed and thoroughly half-assed. Not to mention that it's a ripoff of your other Elfen Lied fic. It started out good, but you cut the story off early without so much as a "real" climax like you just wanted it done and over with.

"Which makes only more sense given he and his son were both Dicloni, Kurumu thought."

Typo... got R+V on your mind?

Why do you always leave Lucy's life as a big maybe? its agonizing! i still think about the baby from the other story, and now i'm going to think about if they ever make it to america.

A satisficatory end, but a little too fast or easy IMO...but overall was nice.

even if they weren’t human took its toll.
[Missing comma after ‘human’]

you Kouta,” she told him.
[Although this dialog is believable (even what I’d expect, yo’re doing a good job with that), I think that it’s missing important narrative tags indicating what she’s doing. I doubt she’d be able to say all of this straight-faced. Either she’d be going glassy-eyed and probably staring at the photo like it was a lifeline or she’d be tearing up and fighting to keep from losing coherence]

he didn’t understand his heartbeat was rising
[_why_ his heartbeat]

I expected to see the confession earlier, but things are proceeding smoothly and very believably. You’re doing an excellent job of portraying the world and characters in this particular divergence, though now we’re sitting on a cliffhanger and I’m waiting for Kouta to faint or something along those lines in the opening of the next chapter. Unless you pull a Lathis and jump into a completely different scene and come back to this later, which could be done.

Chapter 10
with empty unfeeling eyes.
[Missing comma after ‘empty’]

a human Kouta
[Missing comma after ‘human’]

Hearing this Yuka feared
[Missing comma after ‘this’]

stood there unaware
[Missing comma after ‘there’]

dark brown hair a baseball
[Missing comma after ‘hair’]

I’ll be honest: this chapter felt so rushed that the whole story seems weakened. The two deciding to stick together even after Kouta regained his memories I could have easily seen, but the things that came after just felt too quick and lacked the solid storytelling that we’d been getting. I know that this is how things were heading to, but I get more of the sense that you grew tired and wanted the story to end rather than the narrative led to a natural conclusion.

This story is awesome i like these kinds of fics where Lucy and Kouta get to be together.

Very nice. This is an excellent fic. Keep up the good work.

Hey man couldn`t finish it? Not a bad way to end things but I had hoped for more for this fic but still cool like your policy of ending fics even if it comes off as sudden. Too many people abandon fics these days anyway so cool!

I liked it, but I thought the ending was alittle rushed.

Great job. I loved the ending. I was worried you might make the ending tragic.

A bit shorter than your norm, but just as great/enjoyable as always, I'm eager to see what your next story will be about.

Great Fic!