Your story is realy different. It seems like it started down one road and then you totally flipped the script. Did you outline it this way from the start. I did enjoy it, although I am put off by Bella sleeping with another and having another's child. Also, maybe I missed it, but I never really understood how Gabriel so different. Everything about him is human except the fangs and bloodlust. It seems he is a hybrid as well. If he is, does that mean that Aro is too. Maybe the next story will explain it more. Overall, I liked the story. Good job.

WTF!

I think it would be a much better story if Bella and Jacob are together. The story is really good so far though! Keep up the good work!

With the exception of the occasional misspelling or grammar error this was a really good story! I sat down to read it after dinner and didn't get up until it was finished.

Getting to see things from Edwards perspective was nice.

I like Gabriel a lot, but I find it really creepy that Bella is going to have his baby.

The only thing that REALLY bothers me is the whole 'baby has a heartbeat after just a few hours' thing. Even if it is some kinda freak vampire hybrid prophecy child, that just wasn't believable. Also, as a Jacob fan I didn't like the way he was always cast in a negative light. Sure he has issues controlling his temper, but he would ever hurt Bella. He seemed to portrayed as being completely out of control.

Oh, and kudos on making the sex scenes alluring instead of cheesy and crass like something out of a paperback romance novel.

Overall you did exceptionally well. Especially as this was your first story.

I was wondering...what is that makes someone part vampire?

Wow! This story is just mind-blowing! Seriously! I can't believe more people haven't reviewed this. I love the plot, how it's all 'darker'; but I guess it's not for everyone. I'm just sorry I didn't discover it sooner, LOL. Anyway, I'm gonna go read the sequel, I know it's gonna be as amazing as this one!

this is beautiful so far. can u give me pointers on how to make a good story?

this story is so awsome you are a great writer please keep up the great work

Wow that was awesome. Great job!

It can't be Gabriel's child, it has to be Edwards.. a heart doesn't start beating until like a month after conception... and I know this is fanfic here lol but that's just to the extreme; the fact that Gabriel made love the morning of and then all of a sudden Bella has a baby that it's heart is beating that day...but anyway aside from that I absolutely love this story! You have very creative and descriptive writing

thank you, thank you...I cant wait to read your next story!

Just getting better and better ! Thank you

This is fabulous...I can't get enough of this story. So beautifully written! Every chance I can - I try to read more.

well that just sucks

she got taken from gabriel again

he ort to kill himself to not have to sufer anymore...there would have to be some way to do it

it is a really good story but a sad one

edward- hate him, he su-ucks

gabriel- sad for him, lost bis love AGAIN

jacob- tried so hard to get bella but failed...damn!

love this chapter!

jake's back!

i kinda hope they dont kill gabriel...i like him

and i like how bella is a "guardian" that is just so cool!(:

anywayz...good job on this chaper

peace out!(:

AWESOME STORY...but i thought it was a jacob/bella fanfiction. So wat happened to jacob? although i kinda like gabriel (way better than edweirdo) i still wish jake was in the story.

i feel so sorry for gabriel though... and i know i am saying something before finishing your story but i am just curious

but still AWESOME STORY! I ABSOLUTELY LOVE IT

:) TEAM JACOB FOREVER AND ALWAYS