I'm really interested in this story. I hope that you write more soon.

Wow. This looks so, so awesome.

I love AU, and I love MuraxWolf as well, so that the whole interaction in this whole chapter was just love! (ah, melts...)

I hope you'll post the next chapter soon, this is turning out to be an awesomely awesome AU fanfic. w00t!

Happy writings!

~ XEOHE

I actually really liked this, even with the odd crack pairing and AU setting. The originality and adult content are refreshing in the sea of long, boring excuses for fiction in this fandom.

My suggestion to make it even better is to try to add more sensory and peripheral details. I didn't realize Wolfram was supposed to be naked until later than I should have, so clothes and lack-thereof are a huge plus. Describe what the characters hear, smell, taste, see, and feel, including more than interaction with each other. What impact does their environment have?

For instance, you said the room was dark with one light, but not much as far as cleanliness, odor, decor, etc, and the mood that all of the aforementioned would set. A room with little to no furniture (all of which had no padding or comfort), no pictures, a rundown look, hard floor, and the smell of urine would have a deep impact on the mood. Also, one with a red theme, plush furniture decorated in gaudy hearts, and a shag rug would create just as much impact, only in a different direction.

More with the sensory details, what was each character thinking about said environment, along with each other? If you want more of an angle, focus on one character's thoughts and reactions while leaving the other a mystery. I see you were going on this track with Wolfram, but more detail would have driven it home. When he saw Murata, what did he think of his looks? Besides his obvious chemical reaction to the touches, did he feel violated, ashamed, attraction, fear, etc?

I apologize for the long review, but I really think this story as a lot of potential, and I tend to get winded about anything I like. I put this on my alerts, so I hope to see an update soon!

Woah... This is interesting.

Please continue and update soon! ^^

Yum.. very spicy.
Keep em coming.

OMG!
can you write more?
PLEZ... preety please!
I LOVE THIS STORY SO FAR!

Ho, Murata The Pimp, I like that. Interesting ^^

This first chapter really makes me want to read more. I guess I'm just in that kind of mood. This flowed really well and makes you wonder what's going on in this world. I'm looking forward to it.

I can't say I really understand what's going on, like what the heck is Goddeseoce and etc... But I think that's why I'm going to stick around to find out more!XD yeah! I would like an update please!

You most definitely do NOT suck! (no pun intended) ;)
I was like O.O from the beginning till the end. *runs out of tissue from major nosebleed*
Love the way you portray Murata as the pimp.
I always knew that he has that side of him. xD
And Wolf is just so hawt. *fans herself*
You know what? You've just gained a fan hehe^^
Waiting patiently for the next chapter. ^_^

I'm interested to see where you go with this ^_^ Good luck!!

cute update

That was a awesome first chapter! I never thought about Murata and Wolf, but the seem pretty hot! Hurry with the next chapter!!