kyaa! such a subtle way to describe it, and yet so sexy... love your story

aw..that was awesome!! :))

That was an incredibly, beautifully written piece! Highly eloquent and deserving of much praise. Your descriptions were as vivid as they were arousing and you enabled the reader to visualise everything that happened. The way you presented the emotions was a perfect complement to the descriptions. An alluring mix of naughty and nice. The last line was very fitting. It ended the story with a wonderful high. Thank you so much for sharing.

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beautiful piece. :)

wow... the merging of literal and figurative descriptions... very nice fic... short, but full of meaning and essence... hmm, come to think of it, haruka really is more of a master than kantarou... but then, of course, as long as they love each other, it doesn't really matter that much... harukan is such a cute and adorable pairing... XD

Aww... this is so sweet! And obviously Haruka would go after Kantarou! ...hmm hopefully not just because he's shiny... Oh well!!

Seriously though, great descriptions and feel to this story! Way to bring the scene alive and in such a short clip! Few people know how challenging it can be to write a short fic that still leaves a strong impact on the reader! Well done!

Aw that was sweet!

Beautiful! it takes my breath away ^-^