Your writing is very pretty, and fluid. the idea is weird, but it's diffrent so it was a good read.

Ah, that was... Interesting...

You've truly captured something amazing here. L treats the ghost of B the same as he treats the actual one--as if something so morbid and unreasonable really didn't effect him. The lengths L goes to in this to keep his demeanor are astoundingly well done. And I smirked, myself, when L still decides to taunt him (even after finding out he's powerless against B's otherworldly form)--"Whether or not you're a figment of my imagination, I must get back to work."

And his struggle was beautiful, too--"I, feel, NOTHING."

I enjoyed the lip description as well--"One pair dead and hard, the other chapped an scarred." For a second it made me question who's was who's. It cast a nice comparison to the two; it makes L seem more dead than his successor.

I'm note sure if B was truly in "heaven" or just messing with L... Either way, that doesn't leave much to be desired from death, and if that's the whole point of B coming down (besides molesting L), then that's an even more terrifying preface for starting the Kira case.

Well done.

Oh my god
How could I have not discovered your writing until now?! It's absolutely amazing. I love the dynamic you presented between B and L. The Death Note stories like Periculum and Crows at the Perch are full of depth and well crafted. Please write more stories for that fandom <3<3 You're my new favorite writer for this website (and only one of the few talented ones)

Beautiful. Your writing is so well crafted, and it's a relief to read something so thought out and with such depth. Thank you for a good read. Word choice is stunning.

wow I'm so jealous of your writing skills. Each story you put out is amazing. I love your writing style too- it's almost poetic. I hope you continue to write more DN stories because they're so interesting. :D

Twisted . . . yes, very. But I liked it.

B saying "dear" - everytime I read it, it sort of ripped me right out of the story. So uncharacteristic it was.

Liked the ending - it being left open to interp and all. Lovely.

as always, you come up with the most interesting titles.

when you originally told me that you were writing a BxL, i'll admit, this is pretty much the last thing i expected. i mean, the whole ghostie-thing. most people, when dabbling in BxL, seem to go back to their childhood days, make them shack up then. but oh no, you're far too clever and twisted for that, and i love it.

i think you're probably the best writer for B out there. pfft, you say i'm a good writer, and yet this is some seriously stunning work. i mean, this is practically necrophilia (ghotie-philia? xD) and yet you've managed to make it weird and a little unnerving, and then sexy as hell. the dynamic you establish between L and B is stunning; the way that you can manage to give L more emotion than usual (which isn't unprobable, considering he's getting a visit from Christmas Past) without overdoing it is great. I really enjoyed the "I. Feel. NOTHING." It was great, and if you had taken it out of context, one probably wouldn't attribute it to L; but then when you read the whole story, you're like holy shiz, this works, and it works beautifully.

i also love the fact that B went to 'paradise' and that he's in touch with God (which i assume is the shinigami king, but i'm not entirely sure, because either way you spin it, its a *twist*). i also really love the fact that B talks in italics, although it's purely a stylistic thing. excellent! thank you so much!

*clings to you*

This was a nice piece.

People usually display B as disgusting to L, so that was expected, of course L's reactions to him were amusing.

Nice Work.

~Lyson