I agree with you - I like the idea for this story. However, I also like the way you executed it. For me, it was a highlight over a very (to me) important part of the story that got glossed over a bit. As a highlight, it showed me the point in a cool way - not too much, not too little. Like the Baby Bear's porridge, this was just right. I like how you integrated both incidents into this piece; I felt both were important in the game.

I'm sure someone has told you this at some point, but not only do you have a pretty enjoyable Exile written here, your Atton is absolutely fantastic. He was much more real and "Atton" to me that even the one in the game (which I think got kind of smudged). I really enjoyed the interaction between the Exile and Atton, and I don't think straight out romance was needed at all. It was a very touching moment, and it was also very standout because of what he was able to teach her.

I really hope to see more from you - you write this fanfiction very well. I know you said you were running out of game-related circumstances, but I hope you won't let that stop you. From what I've seen, you're very creative and shouldn't have huge problems coloring a little more outside the lines. In fact, I'd be very interested to see what other ideas you have for Atton and the Exile outside of the game events.

Thanks for writing - I had a great time reading.

I absolutely adore this series, and I'm so glad you're still writing! Such a relief to know I'm not the only one who can't seem to get over Atton... heheh. :-) Anyway, this IS a cool concept to explore, though the writing doesn't seem quite as well edited as some of your others... But as always, you dig into the Exile's psychology really well, and have some amazing... I don't know what to call them--little lines and things you include. Like the "if you can't look me in the eye, a fellow murderer, then who can you look at?" point Atton makes, and calling her "Exile" to get her attention... I don't know, you just did some cool stuff with this.

As for other ideas... I don't know, have you done a post-game Exile breaking the news to everyone about going after Revan/trying to leave Atton behind type thing (or NOT leaving him is obviously an option too)? I know a billion people have written an ending to the Sith Lords, since it's nonexistent, but they're not all as good at writing Atton and the Exile as you, or as brave in expanding on what's in-game. I don't THINK you've written one already, but I could be mistaken. Anyway, it was the first thing that came to mind. I'll let ya know if something else occurs to me. Time to stop talking your ear off. :-)

nice one. hmm, ideas...my head is empty. sorry 'bout that.

You always manage to use phrases and lines in your story that I'm furious I didn't come up with first.

I very much enjoyed this story, even if you have your doubts. One of my favorite things about the Exile is that she herself isn't black and white (or isn't supposed to be); she's shades of gray.

And I just love everything about Atton, and you're good at nailing him.