You don't really need to squint to see the LK part

in fact, it's rather bluntly put out no offense

It's a cute fic xD i liked it alot

Hmm, that's really short and not very detailed, but I liked the idea of the Generals betting and it was rather cute. : D

I understand that English isn't your first language and this is your first -fic, so I'll just give you some tips if you don't mind:

1) Try to add a bit more details! Direct speech is cool, but a couple of no-talking paragraphs that say what is happening is even cooler and it makes it easier for the reader to follow the story.

2) Watch ICness! Even if from the little I could see it was rather good (compared to fics of certain other pairings), I don't think Kanda would reply to a 'I love you' in a way another than 'Che' or some slightly romantic gesture (like moving closer to Lavi...or just NOT killing him), also I'd expect Tiedoll to get a little bit more vocal about his little sweet innocent Yuu-kun having a boyfriend! He would at least cry while saying 'I knew it', and add something like 'Yuu-kun's growing up so fast'.

Well, you're young, and you have a way to go, and you seem to be in a good way! Keep practising! :3

It's very short, but cute nonetheless.