 Martin III 2009-04-04 . chapter 1Thoroughly well-written and irresistibly cute. You have a great way with depicting scenes; the opening with Momiji is absolutely picturesque. Everything gets just the right amount of description and flows so smoothly throughout this work. Very pleasant to read.
Good handling of the characters for the most part. Momiji is a bit out-of-character at the end, but otherwise all is good, and I really enjoyed Kunikada. Very amusing little scenario too.
Between you and Laa Chase, we're really seeing a trickle of outstanding Blue Seed fan fiction. I hope this keeps up. |