I read this story before, and I've got to say I really like the new version! It stands out, it's easy to follow, the use of second person added empathy, and you gave dimension to an original character whose real name we never learn. The overall tone felt very harsh, very gritty...and interestingly, not pure Nolanverse. More like a blend with the comics. At least, that's how I read it. Very original of you to feature the oft neglected Zsasz in a fic, and to make all cannon characters cameos. This piece felt like a glimpse into the ordinary people of Gotham. And in a way (if I REALLY look into things), it almost seems like Cherry could symbolize the whole city. She had everything, fell from grace through violence and corruption, encountered the fantastic without astoundingly positive results, and probably met her death at the hands of a mad man. Very unique and well done shot!

Oh my goodness - this was fantastic! Your writing style is REALLY good. I couldn't tear my eyes away from the screen.

I normally don't like OC's like this - you know, the little pretty rich girl who's fallen from grace and is now a prostitute - but your OC was actually likeable. (I hesitate to call her an OC because you wrote in the third person, but I also hesitate to call her "me", if you know what I mean.)

Anyway, like I said before, I thought this was great. I was so disappointed to find that this story was listed as 'complete' - I would so love to read more of this!

Keep up the good work. (:

Sincerely,
HoistTheColours

Ps. Was that the Joker, at the end? I was a little confused.

Wow...I know I've mentioned this before but your amazing. That was just...No words to describe how uttertly scary and, well, awesome that was...cool...it acutally gave me shivers...Kudos.

Oh, Ops. That was incredible. And the use of first person made it feel so immediate and...personal? Meaningful? Real?

But, oddly enough, I don't think the denouement was necessary. It's not bad as a Scarecrow fic, but I think it would have stood better on its own.

-pet pet-

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This is so twisted!Poor Cherry.:(
You need to see a psychologist.lol.
That Jonathan can be such an sob at times,
can't he?:)

that was absolutely fantastic! creepy as hell at the end, but fantastic.

Oh my god, that was so cool. It was amazing, I mean it! Very unique and intriging. You created a character who we become bonded with as she tells us her tale, yet we don't feel sad at the end, because like she stated herself, no one cares much about for long. Jonathan is so dark and twisted but so addictive to read about; he's my absolute favorite character, I love him. Wonderful, wonderful story.

That was amazing! Your writing style is so alluring and clever, I couldn't reading if I wanted to! Great job!

Lovely piece.

I like your style, the way your writing is fragmented and raw, and gives the reader a startling insight into your characters feelings. Your description was unique, very blunt and creative, which I liked. I would love to read more from you ;)