wow, what an original and fresh idea...i'd really, really love to see more of this..please update soon! :)

Pleaze continue the story. I would love to read more. loved the story

Read this on the LJ comm too. Wanted to read it again xD

I guess I'll give you a longer review here.

I really like your idea for this so far! Can't wait to see what happens next. n_n

By the way, this is off topic, but the first time I saw "Ash" I thought this:

Ace: I AM ASH KETCHUM, FROM PALLET TOWN. I WILL BE THE POKEMON MASTER!

Smoker: Smell ya later, Ash.

Ace: Curse you Gary Oak!