Quite the interesting fic, glad you didn't draw things on pointlessly.

Thanks for writing!

I thought you did a good job with your story. Your writing was crisp and easy to read without a lot of grammar or style errors.

I had a problem with all the hitting, though. It's very childish and hurtful for people to hit others even in play. It really sends the wrong message that violence is an acceptable method to get your way.

There were several plot holes that you needed to have filled. For example, why would Harry and Sirius all of the sudden start trusting Remus? Also, why would Ginny accept a date with Michael Corner when in your story, she doesn't seem to have any other relationships except with the twins. If Harry and Ginny were that close then another boy probably wouldn't have asked her out.

I also thought your Harry was a bit of a pansy. He let the girls in his life run his life and never showed any backbone. Hermione was as annoying as in canon, but Harry just let her run his life as if it were her own.

I know all of that sounds like I didn't like your story, but I did. For the most part, I thought it was cute and original.

Great story! :-)

Very fun story, thanks for sharing it with us!

Not so bad, not so bad.

This is absolutely fantastic. I was hesitant after reading the summary - which really doesn't do the story justice. I feared it would be cliche and ordinary. Instead I find a gem of a very long one-shot. I was worried about Remus after Harry told him off. I feared he wouldn't be forgiven (I actually agree on the points Harry made as they applied in canon as well but I do love Remus) but was relieved to see Remus redeem himself. I do wonder whatever became of Ron. Hopefully, he eventually got over his jealousy and decided to work at finding his place in the world. I do wish Hermione and Ginny weren't so violent toward Harry. I realize that they both adore him (in very different ways) but it's always bugged me when authors use hitting and punching as an expression of concern and affection. There's a difference, after all, between spirited and hostile. Anyway, somewhere along the way I fell in love with this little story. Funny and fabulous. You can't beat that combination. :)

OMG I LLOVE THIS!

Very entertaining. Check out the scene with Mme. Maxine again. There may be some inconsistency in the use Potter/Granger names.

Hehehe, I like this one...

It is a wonderful story! :D

I am happy how Harry and Ginny got together and growing together over time. I also thought Yule Mess was done realistic, with their misunderstanding of each other, even as I wish that Harry made it a bit clearer or Ginny more understanding of what Harry really wanted. I am happy that it is not prolonged.

I am a bit confused about Weasleys, if Harry cut off their access to his vault and distrusted them then how could he stays at the Burrow? Did they grow to trust each other? I had thought that It would be Weasleys against Harry with Ginny siding with Harry from start due to her problems with her family. Anyway, it is only spot that is awkward with me, the rest is wonderful!

Keep up with good work!

I'm sorry. I'm really really sorry.

In all my years, there has only been one other fic I couldn't offer some advice for.

This needs to be deleted. There's no sense to it, the style of writing is horrid, nobody acts rights, there's no reason for the crossover, it's just... :screams: This is bad enough that my own work is going to drop a point or two until I get this out of my system.

Oh, and you've broken a couple of FF rules, too.

Always,

Robert Mason

this was bloody billiant. peace

When you started, you had a good premise. The Doctor, taking Harry away from Privet Drive, was unique. But other than that...

I find that I am...not amused...This seemed like an obvious set up to Harry/Ginny from the very start. However, the ways about which you went doing so killed the characters and basically became the books...Congratulations, you're now as crappy of a relationship writer as JKR.

And apparently Hermione makes all the decisions? Oh yeah, great, now just replace Hermione with Dumbledore and you'll have Deathly Hallows...

Yes this is harsh, but your story basically followed the storyline. Where the hell are the large changes that they should sweep through? It's like they took the books and then just used them for knowledge, as in fore-knowledge that became useless anyway, rather than anything useful.

Fun story. There's a few plot holes, but nothing worse than what JKR left herself. :-)

Thanks for sharing this with us.

I never have been much for the Harry/Ginny love stories, as JKR spoiled it for me; however, this is one that is going into my saved stories pile. You wound everything together quite well, using both the Doctor and the Granger Mum as excellent points around which the story swung. I say you used the Granger Mum for one only in the sense that without her 'unity' statement, I can only wonder what Harry would have been like.

There is one question I do have though... Did Rita ever tell Harry where she got her scarf from?

Keep up the good work!

TM