*pokes*
Dude. Story. Finish. Now please. Before I have a total and complete fit. Because, although that would be infinitely satisfying, it would be juvenile and immature of me.

And hey, I like the story.
Haha. Nope, no long rambly review.
Definite prodding though. *prods*

Write.

Brilliant story, very interesting - not to mention exceptionally well written.
You're truly spot on with your description of both Marguerite and Roxton... Not making Marguerite come across as more of a wuss then she is - but not making her too uncaring either.

And Roxton with his touch of concern yet playfulness.

Very enjoyable to read all in all. Thank you very much for sharing, I do hope you will continue this. It's been a long time since the show has graced our televion screens - yet is anything but forgotten!

Wow... Loved it! You did a really great job with the dialogue. Marguerite's lines are hilarious just like on the show and Roxton is also in character. Please update soon :)

Are you going to leave us hanging, or finish this nice story?

Gemini Explorer

This story is very well written. I can't wait to see what happens.

i miss this show can you please write more?

please cwrite more lost world fics! i forgot how much i liked it! roxton whumpage!

I think you're doing a good job with the dialog. And I like that you seem to be setting it up as a cooperative venture for Marguerite/Roxton to resolve the crisis. You're doing a nice job as writing Marguerite as competent, not needy or dependent.

I admit I'm a little reluctant to read a work in progress, so I may wait to read any other chapters until you complete it. It's usually a better idea to finish the story and then just post in chapters if you like. You then post on a regular basis and the story is much stronger.

I'm a little curious as to where you have set the story. Is it within the first three seasons or are you setting a 'virtual' fourth season?

Anyway, good job! I hope you complete it soon.

Would you finish this already! ;) I finally understand our purpose here- to restore the lost art of witty banter to these simple, unsophisticated folk. They have no idea how to carry on the most basic patter with prisoners, it’s disgraceful.”

This has to be my fav line. LOL

Me again. Chapter 3...Wow: I love this!

That quip of Marguerite's about the more pleasant uses for a woman's tongue made me laugh! Sounds like something that I'd have her say.

Your language skills are above average, and your storytelling ability impresses more with each chapter. You have much of Marg.'s quick wit and droll humor.

I'm going to recommend this story to friends on another board. I hope they'll also review the Fic.

More. Soon. Please.

geminiexplorer

This chapter is the best yet! :D

I love Marguerite's fearlessness in the face of the enemy. How she totally threw him for a loop with her sultry sarcasm. LOL. Poor guy probably didn't know what hit *him*.

And then with Roxton! Ah! His comment was so honest and forward. It was so Roxton putting his heart on the line for the barest second. Marguerite's internal dialogue in response to that comment, and the smiling... You have totally nailed these characters. Amazing. This is them, this is M&R. :D

Please finish the story! So far, so good.

The language spoken by the girl in the village sounds vaguely Hawaiian. Did you make it up, or is it a real language?

I hope that M&R will get along, for the most part. I don't like Fics where they're always fighting, although I know that many readers prefer that. After a time, that would have to be limited, if they were to bond as a loving couple. A real life Lord Roxton would tolerate only so much sass from Marguerite.
Her droll sarcasm is funny as humor, but not when she ridicules him.

Let Roxton save them, with Marguerite's help. Too many writers just jerk poor John around, as Marguerite's plaything.
He (and Ned Malone and Challenger) deserve better than they sometimes get, from scribes. That's even more so for poor Finn. Try to get Finn in the story, in a favorable way. Finnykins would be a fantastic asset to M&R, when in need of a friend. She was one of my favorite TLW characters, and I wish that she had appeared in more TV episodes. I realize that most of her fans are male, and that Fic writers are usually female...But don't make all TLW Fics about just M&R.

I'll keep checking on this one. WRITE in it. I want to see what happens! You're doing pretty well, so far.

geminiexplorer

Excellent...I love the bantering between our favorite couple. Even in times of dire stress, a good one liner can relieve the pain a bit.

I can't wait to see what you come up with next!

Excellent beginning! You have a wonderful humor to your writing that is a good match for Marguerite. I really enjoyed this and can't wait to read more.

Immediately after Roxon regained consciousness, he regretted it. I think you forgot a T in Roxon's name. ;)

Other than that, a lovely addition. Love the banter between Marguerite and Roxton. Spot on. :D