I just read your story. i thought it was great.

Eva's aborted escape was a great twist. This story was full of them and it was great that you also ended with one. I like the fact that Zack still didn't say much but an apology Wow! Coming from him that's huge. I loved Zack's final words to Eva. "We'll work this out." It was as fitting a declaration of love as any he could have made.

Great story, very ambitious. An awesome first effort.

The intesity and confusion of this chapter makes me think only one thing. Nightmare. I'm off to chapter 12 to see if I'm right.

Wow! Very intense. You gave us a few moments of calmness only to hit us once again. I found myself thinking yeah, yeah, I've read twin baby stories before, but I never expected that one would die so quickly. At this poin all I want to know is what Zack is going to do. They are his children after all.

Did I say that the last chapter was the best, well this one is even better. Loved the way you set the scene with the remoteness of the location, the lack of communication and the surprise attack. And that was only the beginning of a string of surprises, Zack's appearance, Snuffy's help, and finally the arrival of Max in the van were all unexpected but perfectly logical events. Your graffic and detailed descriptions of Zack's efforts to help Eva were a great addition. Most writers don't even try to go that job, building the tension and keeping it there even down to the final line.

This was the best chapter yet, full of intense emotion and unexpected surprises. Logan's amazement at being able to feel the sheets on his legs was very touching as was Max's surprise at Logan's response when she placed her hand on his thigh. I definitely didn't expect Eva to be pregnant, that was an excellent twist. The best part of all though was Max's feeling that something was wrong. I like the idea that the X5's have an intense connection with each other. Amazing chapter.

Loved the intro to this chapter, the weather, the broken truck, the enforced stay at home leading to one more day on 'the project'. Loved the way you used the email to shift from Eva to Logan's perspective. Congratulations on tackling Logan's therapy in a creative and detailed way. I love the fact taht Bling is involved too. Just what Logan needs.

I like the fact that Logan didn't clue in right away to what he had done. You also did a great job with the nervous tension between Max and Logan. Your characterizations were bang on. And I wholeheartedly agree with you, fanfic is our opportunity to create any type of stuff we want!

"It seemed like their clothes just dissolved." That was a great beginning to Eva and Zack's not quite controlled time together. One thing I really like about your chapters is how well you combine the personal and the action. Of course the virus and it's effect on Max and Logan is intensely personal. Logan's reaction to Max was not farfetched at all. Everything we've seen in season 2 suggests he would be very capable of doing something like that. Great job once again.

The 'heat' thing was a completely unexpected but entertaining interlude. It's interesting that for us readers they are humorous, but for the characters themselves they are emotionally trying. The howling dog was a great way to reinforce the intense frustration that Eva must feel. I really liked your portrayal of a commanding Zack who still believes that everyone will do what he deems is necessary. Once again I appreciate your use of Eva's intelligence with her great idea about how to get her equipment back. Great chapter.

:P Oops! GUess I should have realized last chapter was a dream, huh? That makes sense then. This was good :) Just the kind of ending I was hoping for...a happy one :) This was a great fic all the way through, so thank you very much for writing it. Totally awesome. Hope you plan to keep writing DA.

Ummm...did I miss something? I've gotta go back and reread chapter 10. What the hell is happening? When did Eva lose her memory? And she *dies*? What happens next?

This is incredible so far! Keep it up!

Mm13

Oh, wow...I don't even know what to say about this chapter. It was that awesome. God, the action and the drama...all the emotion... The part at the beginning, with Croane and Eva's research...that was really smart. And your portrayl of Max, Logan, and Zack...especially Zack. And those poor, beautiful babies! You are really gifted to be able to create something like this. I hope Zack does the right thing and stands by Eva and the baby girl. Please? :) I don't want to interfere with your creative process...since you're doing such an awesome job on your own...but please let him have a little heart; let them have a happy ending. He rarely ever gets a happy ending (sigh) Anyhow... I could ramble here forever! This chapter has really got me going! Please update soon. And thanks for this excellent update!

Is there more sex scenes to come?

You write them really well.

just having you on. lil gooch

It was all good.

Eva/Zack together is cool. Shame she doesn't exist on the show.